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Reviewer: Carweirdo3 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 24 2018 1:46 AM Title: Prologue

I’ve been waiting for so long...

Reviewer: Tigernach Signed starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: April 16 2017 11:02 AM Title: Prologue

It has been a year now, and I'm wondering if you intend to continue with this story. You were off to a very interesting start, so where were you going to take it forward? Hope you haven't decided to write it off...

Reviewer: Tigernach Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: December 29 2016 9:57 PM Title: Prologue

This story seems to have great potential, but it hasn't been worked on since early April this past year (2016). The big question is, do you intend to continue with it, and if so, when?

I hope that you will continue it, and soon! Original stories need to be completed on a regularly scheduled basis (though it is understood that sometimes one cannot control available writing time.)

Regardless, you have good story started, and I sincerely hope you will carry on with it.

Reviewer: jlgg Anonymous [Report This]
Date: July 12 2016 10:33 PM Title: Prologue

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Reviewer: Tigernach Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 09 2016 1:55 PM Title: Prologue

You've got a great start here; don't be afraid to continue. Great profession for the human character... where can it take him? I think his meeting with the Elven giantess in the first chapter is great, and bodes well for your story.

Reviewer: Tigernach Signed [Report This]
Date: April 04 2016 6:30 PM Title: Prologue

This looks to be a very interesting story.  I can't wait to see more. You've got my vote to continue... ASAP!

Reviewer: The Shrunken Scholar Signed [Report This]
Date: April 04 2016 2:33 PM Title: Prologue

Not bad for a first story at all. I'm definitely interested to see where it goes. A bit more description couldn't hurt though. Welcome to the community!

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: April 04 2016 9:11 AM Title: Prologue

Short intro chapter, but I'm liking this already!

Reviewer: lancealot501 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 04 2016 8:23 AM Title: Prologue

First off I would like to say that I'm enjoying this story so far and I'm really hoping that this continues. Now that I've told you how good of a job you have done it is now time to give you some critiques.

The biggest problem I have is with the first aid portion of this story. The first thing you should do for a head injury is apply a tourniquet around the neck to stop the bleeding...sorry that was a joke that always comes up in any cls class. The real problem I had was with how the elf was positioned. I imagined her sitting against a tree unconscious. If so then the MC would have to climb up her body, and depending on where her head is, stand on her neck. I don't imagine that it'd be easy to stand on an unstable surface and apply pressure for 15 minutes. If she was laying down on her back or side I would be fine with it. Now comes the second part. If she was sitting then the guy would have to be on her. When she would try to get up then he would definitely fall off. If she was on the ground then this wouldn't be a problem at all.

Again I would like to say good job and hope that you continue this.

Reviewer: dood07 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: April 03 2016 11:25 PM Title: Prologue

Hello, I've seen your message in the shoutbox and here I am !
I'm French so I'm affraid I won't be of any use for grammatical's advices. But I surely can tell you that this first chapter was really enjoyable ! Though this chapter is a bit short.. Makes me think of the first story I wrote, but I believe your chapters will get longer with time :) There's no particular need to add content in them, but more descriptions could be nice ;)
As for the scenario, I've got to say that it is really interesting, captivating ! I don't know why this elven girl said "human!" in such an exclamative manner, but it felt like she was affraid of this race. I can't help but wonder that her wound comes from a human, but then maybe she'd be teleported in this universe too. Unless there are real humans in this universe, bigger than her.. I'll be sure to find this out in the following chapters !

This start was really great, and you can be sure you've gotten yourself a reader right here !

Author's Response:

Thanks for the comments.  All will eventually be made clear.  Also, thanks for the advice.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the comments.  All will eventually be made clear.  Also, thanks for the advice.

Reviewer: The Lurkmeister Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 03 2016 10:41 PM Title: Prologue

Honestly a really great start. Your spelling and punctuation are already good out of the gate, so the reader isn't distracted by anything like that. The story you've written is compelling. I'd say don't be afraid to describe just a little bit more, but I think that's just s stylistic choice. There were only a couple times where the writing was a little unclear, and it didn't significantly impact my enjoyment of it.

Can't wait to read more of this, please. :-)

Author's Response:

I appreciate any and all constructive feedback.  I haven't taken an English class in ages haha.  I can definately agree with more desciptions.  Thank you for the review.

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