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Reviewer: youre_my_slave Signed [Report This]
Date: April 25 2016 9:20 PM Title: The Gang

I was just going to mention a continuity error I noticed. Alright, so, the first girl to die is the dark skinned girl, and it's my understanding that the red haired twenty something year old that Andre really likes was the one sentenced to murder Cal, but you sort of make it sound like the dead girl was the one to kill him ("14 years old", "dark face")

But uh, you can take what I type with a grain of salt.



Author's Response:

Oh, there two dark skinned girls. But one of them, the older one who died, was one of the extras I wanted to get rid of so I could characterized the rest of the dolls effectively. I think. I'm sorry if this created confusion. Also, I'm working on the story, it's just I've had school and have been busy. Thanks for your patience.

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 07 2016 12:11 AM Title: The Gang

Bravo, good stuff



Author's Response:

Thank you, I try. 

Reviewer: youre_my_slave Signed [Report This]
Date: April 06 2016 10:41 PM Title: The Gang

Do the dolls have biological need for human activities such as eating, sleeping, and excreting? Or do they have the drive to do it but no actual need for it (you feel like you're starving to death but you won't die from not eating) Or just no need or drive at all?



Author's Response:

They have the drive but no need. It's like how a Pokémon doesn't need you to pet it in pokemon amie, but it sure does help. 

That was the only comparison I had, sorry. 

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