[Report This]Date: July 01 2016 4:40 AM Title: A wager between friend's
I wasn't expecting a new chapter so soon, nice!
Now is time for my favorite girl, Kai. It seems the power that the twins gave her isn't useful only for defending againts strangers but also for "contributing to the twins". I'm intrigued by her behavior and hope to know soon the reason for it, also curious about her scent.
There's now the thing with Lily, it seems only the twin see her as a friend and maybe Kai, though I'm not really sure about the last. Also the twin's plan which is still a mistery is popping up more in the dialogue recently.
And it seems the twins had a "talk" with May about the ways shen handles the tinies, kind of amusing to see them flustered, even if just a bit.
Anyway, good chapter, really looking forward to the next one.
Author's Response:
Thank you KentaRyu, your reviews are always amazing to read and make me happy to write quicker! I'll try to have the next chapter up post haste!
Date: June 30 2016 5:56 PM Title: A wager between friend's
They're taking the law into there own hands, and they don't see a problem with them because they're killing "monsters". But who are they to decide that? Someone stronger than them could judge them as a "monster" and just as easily dispose of them. Instead of being Judge, Jury, and Executioner, they should be Doctor, Therapist, and Teacher. For all there talk of morality, they need a big dose of humility and empathy. I do hope karma catches up to them.
Oh, and for some reason, the twins just remind me of those creepy kids from Akira.
Author's Response:
Hmm, where are the line's drawn for morality and civility? Perhaps your right, or perhaps there's a bigger picture that has yet to be revealed. Thank your for your review, it was intresting to see such a strong opinion such as yours.
[Report This]Date: June 30 2016 1:41 PM Title: A wager between friend's
Dang! Beautiful chapter!
Lots of foreshadowing, and tension, in this one. I can't wait for the next chapter! Keep up the amazing work!
Author's Response:
Thank you Dante :D
I'll try to please!
Date: June 26 2016 1:49 AM Title: May-be this won't be so bad?
Weeeell, Claire had a little naughty fun with Kat and twins not so long ago, and now she call that guy a pervert ^^
Nice chapter by the way. Nice to see more of this story. And now I'm worry what will heppend when Kai or Lilith put thair hands on Clair Oo
Author's Response:
Thank you so much Silver for taking your time to review :) I appreciate your thoughts on the matters at hand!
[Report This]Date: June 15 2016 2:14 AM Title: May-be this won't be so bad?
Is nice to see a new chapter. Now getting to know more about May, it seems her situation isn't as tragic as Kat's but still pretty serious.
I liked the relationship Claire formed with May, and I'm a bit interested in how the twins would explain May what she was doing with that man.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you liked it Kentaryu :D I was begining to worry i made it to tame. I havent had a lot of reviews in my last couple chapters. But i plan on making it get better soon.
[Report This]Date: June 10 2016 2:55 PM Title: May-be this won't be so bad?
Nice chapter! I'm very happy another chapter was added, I can't wait for more! However, I did find a few grammatical errors, but nothing too major. I can't wait for the next one!
Author's Response:
Aww i thought i nailed all those in when i re-read it :(
I'll try to make it cleaner next chapter, thank you for telling me!
[Report This]Date: May 03 2016 2:05 PM Title: Rewarding good behaviour
Another good chapter. It's nice to have some time with the twins before the next girl and also quite interesting see how different they can make Kat's cat bath idea.
What is the twins' great plan that hey have for Claire and what kind of "modifications" the have made to the other girls is something I'm looking forward to see.
Anyway, things are looking good for the next chapter
Author's Response:
I'm glad you enjoyed it. I didn't want to just give one girl a spotlight then never have her shown again, so expect each of the girls to be current in most of the chapters :)
As for Claire's role in the twins plans, well thats not going to be revealed just yet >:p
Date: May 03 2016 5:01 AM Title: Fated meetings
Just read it and... wow! Great story, realy!
I like the way you expand your charicters, and all of them have a very interesting personalities. Can't wait to see where it's all going and what twins are planning to do with Clair.
And... Is Kat was created as a reference to Taokaka? :3
Author's Response:
Actually i based her personality off Tao XD i'm surprised someone noticed. Also wanted to make her stand out, i have plans for her in the future as well. While she doesn't look like her one bit, i based that off a different image entirely. But yea, i wanted her to have that fun type of speech.
[Report This]Date: April 16 2016 3:47 AM Title: Kat toy
Good chapter, its nice to know more about Kat and see her have some fun in the end, the only thing I would point out is that I dont really think the title fits the chapter since Kat doesnt really uses her as a toy but thats just me nitpicking, everything else was pretty good.
Also I wonder about what Kat said that only the people she wanted could see her and how Claire saw her anyway. Hope to see more soon.
Author's Response:
I was some would catch onto that, i guess with time you might find out :)
[Report This]Date: April 15 2016 7:08 AM Title: Fated meetings
Awesome story :)
Author's Response:
Thank you SheerForce, that really means a lot to me :)
[Report This]Date: April 14 2016 4:41 PM Title: Kat toy
Wow!! What a chapter! Powerful insight into who Kat is, and the altruism of Claire.
Eagerly awaiting the next chapter!
Author's Response:
I'm glad you liked it, i was worried the chapter might be to long.
[Report This]Date: April 13 2016 6:57 PM Title: Prove your worth
Enjoying this quite a bit, eager to see more.
Author's Response:
I'm glad it's to your liking i'll try to keep pleasing with it
[Report This]Date: April 12 2016 2:10 AM Title: Prove your worth
It's really nice that we have time for all of the girls. Really looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review KentaRyu, i appreciate it. I'll try to give each girl their own chapter before this story ends and a few chapter's inbetween as well. I'm glad your looking foward to whats coming next!
[Report This]Date: April 09 2016 4:58 PM Title: Prove your worth
The plot thickens...
Author's Response:
Indeed it does...
Date: March 18 2016 1:51 PM Title: Fated meetings
This was an awesome story so far and very interesting and well done!!!!
I just wanted to know when the next chapter will be out because i am eager to read more! Thanks!
Author's Response:
I will try to finish it soon, i'm working on it as quick as I can. Thank you for your review!
[Report This]Date: March 16 2016 6:51 PM Title: What we are
Dark...very well writen concept but this has reached Stephen King levels of holy shit.
Author's Response:
XD I appreciate your words, i hope it's still to your liking with upcoming chapters :)
[Report This]Date: March 07 2016 8:25 AM Title: Fated meetings
Very nice story you've got here! I like Lily stuck up personality lol! Please continue writing.
Author's Response:
I will continue soon, just have to write a few more chapters first. I wrote all of them at once and broke them apart into seperate ones.
[Report This]Date: February 25 2016 3:58 AM Title: Let The Games Begin
Great chapter, I hope we get to see more of Kai since she's my favorite now, anything with sweat, smell, nose or something tomboy-ish would be fine with me. Unaware is also pretty good.
Of course I'm also looking forward to what you have prepared for the other girls. Looking forward for the next chapter.
Author's Response:
All of the girls will get their own chapter in time, telling more about them and feature them each, don't worry :)
[Report This]Date: February 24 2016 6:59 PM Title: Let The Games Begin
Village of the Damned lol, that said great character crafting.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much for the review, i'll try to update soon :)
Date: February 24 2016 5:13 PM Title: Fated meetings
great story! Since you asked for input can i request a chapter of unaware interactions with May? the girls could prank her in various ways and she would be none the wiser with some vore and barefoot crush
Author's Response:
Oh don't you worry my friend, there will be unaware giantess play afoot, and yes i used that word purposefully.