[Report This]Date: March 05 2016 8:52 PM Title: Hygiene
Awesome chapter bro! I like how you go outside your comfort zone and still give us greatness! I wonder how our hero will escape this fate. Plus I love the one lined chapter titles. Keep up the great work, the wait was worth it!
Author's Response:
Thanks!
Date: March 05 2016 5:44 PM Title: Hygiene
Well, I rarely find anything about the stories, here, that would displease me enough to give a score lower than a perfect ten. Usually, eight points at worst. But, this particular bathroom scene felt a little _overly_ descriptive to me. A needless case of WTMI, as they say.
So, while I apologize if I was _overly_ blunt, the basic underlying feeling is still there and is not likely to change. That being said, however, I promise I will follow this story to the concluding chapter.
Author's Response:
I can see the issue with being too descriptive. I felt I was no more or less descriptive than any other chapter, but given the subject matter that can make an impact. I do apologize if I went a tab overboard with it, but I would never want to be less descriptive of any given scene just to tone it down. I love writing realistic fiction in general, even moreso for stories involving macrophilia, as it gives a sense for having this happen for real. Events and such aren't "less gross" just because one doesn't like. It is what it is and there's not a damn thing you can do about it. I actually want to try and be even more descriptive and really slow down and experience every moment that happens, but there is a limit because overtime it begins to get very redundant. That's probably why this was moreso detailed because it was a new topic and I really got to flesh it out.
This is pretty much the most of this particular subject you'll ever see me write (honestly this was pretty light compared to other stuff I've read which just goes nuts) as I'm not the biggest fan of it. But I like to include different things and many different scenarios to mix it up. So, yeah, basically descriptions are here to stay. I've kind of lost sight of where I was going with this, but whatever. I appreciate your dedication and hope that future chapters will be more up your alley! :)
Date: March 05 2016 7:14 AM Title: Hygiene
Correct me if I'm wrong. But, isn't it mandatory to include the euphemism "water sports," if you're going to have a gross bathroom scene like this?
Author's Response:
I honestly wouldn't know. If you would like I can add it to the list, but I dislike having tags like that. I feel tags should be used for what the entire story is about, not a single section of on chapter. That to me is misleading. But like I said if it is mandatory or if you really want I can add it in.
P.S.
I like you man, seriously thank you for also reviewing it means a lot to me and I enjoy hearing what you say, but calling it "gross" just feels like an attack towards my writing. It's fine if that's not your thing. It's fine if you think that. I'm the last person that'll ever tell you how to think or what to like. I'm just saying there really is no need to call it that. If you removed it from your sentence it would still mean the same thing just. But you're an adult and free to make your own decisions so by all means do whatever you feel is right. I'm just speaking my opinion. :)
Date: March 04 2016 11:01 PM Title: Hygiene
Good chapter! I like where this is going however I have a feeling that the story is ending soon. I am really enjoying the story and hope there is more too it but if this is the end so be it.
However, I hope you come out with more stories after this one finishes up.
Author's Response:
I dislike stories that go one for longer than they really should, so it will end at some point. But it's just about to be Day 3. Day 1 was chapter 1-5, Day 2 was chapter 6-12, so Day 3 is 13-?? So we'll see! Thanks for reading!!