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Reviewer: fierysport Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 23 2019 10:15 PM Title: Chapter 1: The Forbidden Act

Amazing and engaging story.  I had to read the final few chapters over and over again.  It's one fo the most erotically descriptive prose I've ever come across, especially when Jumko is inside Nadia's mouth and gut.  I wonder if Nadia is based on a real life character known to the author?  

I wasn't sure about the whole castration thing.  Could have been more sensual had he been allowed to keep his genitalia, albeit as a vastly reduced size.  I also couldn't accept Nadia's words (out of context) given she was a virgin and about to experience sex for the first time.

Overall I loved it and especially the whole concept of having to swallow a live being to almost trigger the fertility process.  Well done and deserving of a follow up or similar prose.   

Reviewer: versusterminus7 Signed starstar [Report This]
Date: February 23 2016 12:31 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Forbidden Act

The good

-cool and intriguing plot

-handjobs

-manages to build a somewhat decent society. tells a lot with few words.

-hand jobs for everybody

-each character's voice is distinct, a rare talent

 

the bad

-cool and intriguing plot for like 4 chapters

-tone is stuck in a time warp- cant make up it's mind

-so much cuckold its painful

-like form ch 5 on

-so much fucking cuck

-chicken goes cuck cuck cuck

-says right here that jumk is a lil bitch

-it's not the wedding wine you honking cock-snogging spunkchariot, its you, jumko the fuckboy

-hand jobs from mom

-freudian paradise

-did i mention that there's a shitton of cuck

 

the uncomfortably real

-i became physically uncomfortable at the testicle slaps

 

not the worst story ive read. its good for entertainment if nothing else. 2/5

Reviewer: hunterfury22 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 21 2016 6:28 PM Title: Chapter 1: The Forbidden Act

Forget all the stupid dweebs. I loved this story and thought it was engaging. I loved the fact that Nadia ate him and had no remorse. I'm tired of good old fashion endings. Thank you for writing this its one of my favorites now please don't ever delete it.

Reviewer: bottleofwater2003 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 21 2016 8:55 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Forbidden Act

I wasn't thrilled with the ending just because I felt bad for Jumko, but I can appreciate how well written this story is to bring out those emotions. Excellent work!

Reviewer: ASenpai Signed [Report This]
Date: February 21 2016 2:40 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Forbidden Act

I must say it was a well thought out and engaging story with a wide variety of characters each with their own quirks. I must admit I have mixed feelings about the ending. It was great of course, do not get me wrong. I just feel...bad for Jumko if that makes sense. Not the vore part, just the circumstance. Nadia was a little insensitive but other than that I understand her position. 

 

All in all, Jumko's overconfidence was his weakness...and his faith in his friends as well! XD

 

Keep on writing friend that hit the emotions deep and that's the best kind of story.

Reviewer: dudeduderson2000 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 19 2016 5:50 PM Title: Chapter 1: The Forbidden Act

Not a bad story, definitely more plot development than anything I write.  I can't help but think that this society is going be screwed when their version of Columbus crosses the Atlantic though.

Reviewer: bottleofwater2003 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 19 2016 7:42 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Forbidden Act

Beautiful story so far. Instant favorite. Keep up the good work!

Reviewer: eldorado Signed [Report This]
Date: January 18 2016 6:33 PM Title: Chapter 1: The Forbidden Act

Well, this story's deffinitely up there as one of my all time favorites so far with the character development you see. My only lament is that Jumko never got to call Yuli out on how much of a hypocrite she was being, though that was probably smart since that didn't go too well with Nadia. I really hope he gets thrown a bone since everything came crashing down on him at once after a freak occurence. And when he understandably protests what is (fetish aside) a pretty ghastly death, then he was pretty much tortured until he wanted to kill himself. But again great story, I found it impossible to stop reading.

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 15 2016 9:31 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Forbidden Act

Interesting story. Always exciting and scary theme with shrinking involved is, when loved ones turn against you and when it's done in a believable way. That is what I find most interesting in these type of scenarios. Who will remain your friend and who will betray you.
Good build up.

 

 

Reviewer: Dragonling Signed [Report This]
Date: January 10 2016 4:18 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Forbidden Act

Amazing story. Excellent work on character development and how you've set up the universe.

Reviewer: ZeR0x Signed [Report This]
Date: January 05 2016 3:40 PM Title: Chapter 1: The Forbidden Act

Awesome updates. Just awesome!

Reviewer: bottleofwater2003 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 04 2016 12:32 PM Title: Chapter 1: The Forbidden Act

Great story so far! You are excellent at really setting the mood and tone in the story and make the characters seem real and relatable. Hope to see more!

Reviewer: combine45 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 03 2016 2:01 PM Title: Chapter 1: The Forbidden Act

I'm really digging this so far. The sense of abandonment and lack of compassion from Jumko's family really sets up his despair. Seems like he eather has to accept his fate and go with the girl he loved or take his chances with the suspicious but beautifull Xanthe. Personally id take my chances with her but she could be planning some even worse things than a quick death with Nadia. I'd like to see things swing back in a positive direction for Jumko. First step avoid castration somehow hopefully. Don't worry about the impatient readers. I think youve realy set things up well prior to his shrinking.

Reviewer: mattgrecs Signed [Report This]
Date: December 28 2015 12:11 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Forbidden Act

It's really good just do what you do ..... Like its a story I would read in my normal reading list just because it has a interesting premise and great character development

Reviewer: theprinceh Signed [Report This]
Date: December 27 2015 12:53 PM Title: Chapter 1: The Forbidden Act

Loving this story so far it seems amazing, Keep up the good work

Reviewer: ZeR0x Signed [Report This]
Date: December 26 2015 11:56 PM Title: Chapter 1: The Forbidden Act

Id advise you not to care too much about people saying you arent going fast enough. This build-up seems excellent and youre really building an interesting world. Great quality writing, will be keeping a close eye on this one!



Author's Response:

A large part of this story will focus on a full grown Jumko as he struggles to come to terms with his fate to be shrunken and eaten and none of his friends or family seem interested to help him out. I need a few chapters of development to make every charcter's actions seem believable.

Reviewer: OneInch Signed [Report This]
Date: December 25 2015 6:10 PM Title: Chapter 1: The Forbidden Act

This concept seems really good, but just bare in mind this is giantess world. People will get bored of your story if there is no shrinking any time soon, which there doesn't seem to be.

Author's Response:

I've added to the story notes detailing that this story is split into 3 acts. The first act will focus on Jumko preparing for the ritual and fighting. This act also contains a lot of important character development and helps to explain the religion and culture of the universe. The second act will focus on Jumko struggling to come to terms with his fate to be shrunken and the reactions of his friends and family. The third and final act will focus on a shrunken Jumko as he is prepared to be eaten.

I'm trying to do something unique here where the story focuses on a full grown character as he knows he is about to be shrunken and nobody will help him. I haven't seen any stories written from this perspective. The last few chapters will contain lots of interaction between shrunken men and normal sized women.

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