[Report This]Date: February 14 2007 4:05 AM Title: Chapter Seventeen: There is no try, only do or do not!
Ah, and now the story shifts up a gear!
Author's Response: Yup, and i am hoping to get the next chapter done this weekend.
Date: February 09 2007 11:36 AM Title: Chapter Fifteen: Finding your own way
Glad to see the change.It seems to help make the read easier! You are alwasy getting better man.
As to this chapter...I like that things are going to get back to normal for the family...haha sort of, Well for most of them anyways. It is jac that is going to need to adjust to the changes in his world ...even if pouty little ally is the reson for all his troubles. Hes going to have to learn to bite his tongue around her when he finds out she made him that way!!!! ( or maybe he wont??)
Date: February 06 2007 4:22 PM Title: Chapter Fourteen: “Prove yourself faithful with the little things so that you may be granted greater.”
Oooh, an interesting turn of events in chapter 14. so Al is behind all of jaces misery huh? Oh dear. I hope she doesnt admit she knows why he is so small. Its not like anyone would ever figure out her part in the whole thing. She should fess up that shes got him prisoner in her bedroom though. Then Jenni and miranda will get to see him!!!!
Interesting storytelling Ced. At first I was confused by the flashback that started the chpater and then I realized you were intertwining character development. it was a bit confusing the way you presented it but onsecond reading, its just fine.
Wait till Miranda finds her Jac as a helpless little doll. I am hoping that shes the gentle type. After jacs experience with his wild kid sister, I am hoping that both jenni and miranda give him alot of loving and sweetness as he will need it now.
Time will tell.
I look forward to alot more.
I just hope al doesnt ruin everything by coming too clean. We need her to be around as a mean spirited and teasing giantess for jace!
Date: February 06 2007 4:21 PM Title: Chapter One: You are your own worst enemy
See, I had a feeling there was a good explanation...
Date: February 06 2007 4:12 PM Title: Chapter Thirteen: Waiting
Nice nice chapter. For alot of reasons I enjoyed this one immensely. First off, I love the way he is trying to convince himself that his sister is not a giant. Shes just a little sister. TOO FUNNY! Its a great idea to have him denying his new place in the world and his new place in the lives of the giants! Thats one of my favorite things in stories like these where the now shrunken person still tries to convince himself that he is the same person ( only smaller) He will in time have to face the reality that they are giants and he is liek a pet to them. It will be a hard pill to swallow for the first born. In the meantime, you keep emphasthizing his denial which is very welldone. it make the humiliation he feels all the more wonderful.
The theres the part about the warmth of her hand. i just love that ced. It would be so true if someone were that small. Hed want the warmth and the closeness to a giant and yet, it would be totally embarrassing too. Its almost like when al drops him, he comes back to reality. He is able to just vanish into the warmth of her hand and then hes thrown back into reality. I hope when miranda and jenni get tiny jac, they spend long hours holding him in their hands. ( maybe mirnada will place him in other warm places too???) Its embarrassing as hell to be in his sisters hand but it sure must make him feel good as prose describes it as if its kinda paradise.The warmth of her hand felt good as it warmed me up! NICE!
The there is the waiting....LOL He has too much time on his hands! Looking at her brush....her socks, having to contemplate his situation as he waits for her to take him out. Then she comes back home and hes nothing more than an item on her agenda. Hes insignificant which makes him furious! He waits and waits and waits and then she turns on her music and doesnt even want to know what he has to say! JUST NOD lol Nice.
Great story! Great chapter!
Then she drops a shrimp on the shrimp! Can you imagine the embarrasment of being treated that way? I loved in LITTLE AFFECTION when the daughter dropped the crumbs in on her tiny dad in her pocket. Thats what this scene reminded me of. I was hoping that jennie was going to find him though. Ally is so so immature. Poor jac. I have a feeling its going to get worse before it gets better for him.
HTP
[Report This]Date: February 02 2007 11:28 PM Title: Chapter Thirteen: Waiting
Keep going man, I'm finding myself checking quite often for updates of this story.
Author's Response: im glad you are enjoying the story deviant.
Date: January 31 2007 11:18 AM Title: Chapter Twelve: Enter Miranda, Stage Left
interesting. A new character! ( not a sister but a short girl that jacen teased) Miranda sounds to be a pretty interesti9ng teenaged girl. I cant wait till jenni and miranda find jacen in his new state!
I like the way this come out of the blue. An interesting beginning to the next phase of our story. Poor jac. :)
Author's Response: Miranda has a big part in the second phase of the story.
Date: January 31 2007 11:14 AM Title: Chapter Eleven: The Day After
I can see how hard you worked on this chapter Ced. It really shows. nice job. Its one of my favorite chapters yet.
I love the way Al talks to jacen. She isnt even aware of how her attitude is changing towards him but it is obvious to the reader. I love when she tells him that he can speak now. So demeaning. And jacen obeys! excellent. Al is definitely starting to think of jacen as a pet rather than as a person and its happening so innocently that it makes it all the more humiliating!
I cant wait to jenni sees jacen for the first time. I have a feeling she is older and will treat jacen a lot differently than al does.
I love that allyson teases him bringing back what he used to say to her... you have to be this tall! haha I can see her looking down on him making gestures with her hands as jacen looks up futilely. She is enjoying this siuation alot and shes not even really got used to have a doll sized brother. Wait till she becomes comfortable with his situation and realizes hes going to be like that for awhile! Excellent!
Another aspect I love in this chapter is the way jacen starts to think of them as giants. you have written it beautifully. He does not even think of himself as their equals anymre and this is going to come into play. He is already seeing them as a pet looks up to how owners. That will be difficult for our first born to deal with as his sisters get used to being the giants too!
Great story. I do hear where you are coming from as far as the rewrites and the desrie for perfection. I have been there. From this reades perspective, you are doing great! I dont think you should put so much pressure on yourself...just write! You are doing great.
cant wait for more! Im guessing that al sounds to be about 12 and that jenni is maybe 16 or 17. I bet I am right but you dont have to tell me.
I have tried finding you on aim at night but so far you havent been on when I login, hope to find you there soon so we can talk again!
Htp
[Report This]Date: January 27 2007 5:10 PM Title: Chapter Eleven: The Day After
I like how things are going.. The realism is interesting, as you said in another comment.. it's nice to see a different take than brother shrinks.. sister takes instant power trip.. sometimes people don't know what to do and some people can't always make decisions.. I have the feeling this story is going to go on for quite some time.. and i know i'll love every minute of it.. I look forward to seeing each new chapter.. and it made my day seeing it at the recent stories top.. thank you!
Date: January 18 2007 11:02 PM Title: Chapter Ten: The Death of my Brother
another great chapter Ced. I love the way allyson seems to be handling this change in jacen. She seems to really be a little girl about it! Heh heh. I think shes going to figure out its best for everyone to keep her little secret to herself for awhile. Her parents dont need to know. I think shes going to enjoy keeping him as her own!
I just hope she shares her news with jennie and maybe her friends too. That way jacen can get alot of girls picking him up and keeping him warm.
Great great story ced. I cant wait for the next chapter! I am so hooked.
HTP
Author's Response: Thanks HTP, i have worked hard to try to add a degree of realism to the characters. I didn't want alyson to just oh look my brother shrunk, awesome, begin powertrip mode which you see in alot of stories. THere is nothing wrong with that don't get me wrong i just wanted to do something different and it seems to be paying off so far.
Date: January 18 2007 10:38 PM Title: Chapter Nine: Facts and Reality
This is an awesome story Ced. I have been commenting over at giantesscity on it but as you add new chapters ( please add chapter 10 soon!!!) I will comment here from now on. I love your characters. I love the way allyson talks to and treats her brother already....Not even realizing that its jacen. Wait till she does accept that fact! And what about jennie, Jacens twin! How will she act when allyson shows jacen to her? I cant wait. I love how allyson calls him buggie and treats him like pet food when she first finds him! Its got to be so humiliating for him as well as deathly frightening! Imagine having your kid sister treat you as if you are dinner for her pet? OMGAnd you get at the fear that jacen feels nicely too! I love it. Scared of her and shes just a little sis! If it were only real ! If only we could figure out a way to make it happen for real right ced?on the last chapter: chapter 9.... you sorta backtrapped which at first frustrated me as I read it. I was loving where we were and then you went back sorta and changed it. Then I thought about it and was actually intrigued by what you did. You employed an interesting writing technique and it makes sense in dlaying the confrontation. Well done. I do hope that allyson realizes soon that it is jacen though. I particulary like it when jacen thinks back to how it was before. i think thats a rich goldmine of material for the characters. how jacen treated the sisters before can come out in the flasnbacks and it will make the present situation even more rewarding as the girls treat their big brother in a whole new light. keep up the great work. I will comment more on the next part as soon as I read it!your bud Htp
Date: January 18 2007 10:21 PM Title: Chapter One: You are your own worst enemy
Interesting twist...looking forward to more.
Author's Response: wow, thanks DX The fact you are even reading this story is an honor to me. Your one of the reasons i even started writing anything. I never enjoyed writing until i read some of your stories.
Date: January 18 2007 9:39 PM Title: Chapter Ten: The Death of my Brother
This story just keeps getting better and better.. I love what you're doing here.. I can't wait to read more.. :)
Author's Response: thanks, imhoping to get another chapter out this weekend.
Date: January 14 2007 5:47 PM Title: Chapter Nine: Facts and Reality
Interesting denial angle.. I look forward to seeing how this plays out.
Date: January 08 2007 11:00 AM Title: Chapter Seven: "We must accept finite disappointment, but never lose infinite hope."
The threat of being fed to her lizard was a great idea. Too bad for him that she feinted before she could get him help. Great story. :)
Author's Response: thanks, im glad you are enjoying it. I orginally had a scene planned with him in the cage with hte lizard but i took it and went the direction you see now.
[Report This]Date: January 07 2007 5:44 PM Title: Chapter Six: “We come nearest to the great when we are in great humilty"
Thought buggie was a dog at first, being called to lick up the chips from the floor. interesting that she thinks he's just a bug.. wonder how long it will take her to notice.. :)
[Report This]Date: January 03 2007 11:27 PM Title: Chapter Five: "Fall seven times, stand up eight"
I'm loving this story! Thank you for this chapter.. This is really turning into quite the epic.. thank you for keeping it so voyeur.. I love that!
Author's Response: The voyuer part, i feel will help make him more of a character people care about, later on.
[Report This]Date: January 01 2007 4:07 AM Title: Chapter One: You are your own worst enemy
great story, I love the voyeur aspect to it, it adds a lot of suspense.
Author's Response: thanks ronnie, I have always been a voyuer fan myself, so its easy to write what you like.
[Report This]Date: December 25 2006 11:53 PM Title: Chapter One: You are your own worst enemy
Liking it, liking it......
Author's Response: thanks, I am really surprised by the success of this story. I started out writing as just a throwaway story to prepare myslef for a story im writing for cassadria.
[Report This]Date: December 23 2006 6:12 PM Title: Chapter One: You are your own worst enemy
really fun stuff so far man.. this last update really was cool.. i'm glad you decided to write this story.. i hope to hear more! :)