This is an awesome story Ced. I have been commenting over at giantesscity on it but as you add new chapters ( please add chapter 10 soon!!!) I will comment here from now on.  I love your characters. I love the way allyson talks to and treats her brother already....Not even realizing that its jacen. Wait till she does accept that fact! And what about jennie, Jacens twin! How will she act when allyson shows jacen to her? I cant wait. I love how allyson calls him buggie and treats him like pet food when she first finds him! Its got to be so humiliating for him as well as deathly frightening! Imagine having your kid sister treat you as if you are dinner for her pet? OMGAnd you get at the fear that jacen feels nicely too! I love it. Scared of her and shes just a little sis! If it were only real ! If only we could figure out a way to make it happen for real right ced?on the last chapter: chapter 9.... you sorta backtrapped which at first frustrated me as I read it. I was loving where we were and then you went back sorta and changed it. Then I thought about it and was actually intrigued by what you did. You employed an interesting writing technique and it makes sense in dlaying the confrontation. Well done. I do hope that allyson realizes soon that it is jacen though. I particulary like it when jacen thinks back to how it was before. i think thats a rich goldmine of material for the characters. how jacen treated the sisters before can come out in the flasnbacks and it will make the present situation even more rewarding as the girls treat their big brother in a whole new light. keep up the great work. I will comment more on the next part as soon as I read it!your bud Htp