Reviews For The First Born
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Reviewer: DansterBoy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 06 2019 6:38 AM Title: Chapter One: You are your own worst enemy

Went searching for some good unaware stories, and I got to say, I struck gold with this. No vore, no breasts, so I was a bit concerned if I would like it. But the story telling was so powerful for me it made up 100 fold. 

I wish there was a bit more to the ending however. Seems to be wrapped up rather quickly. I wanted the mom to finally discover he isnt dead, but the fact that the future isnt told is nice because it makes you wonder what happened...

Good job. Fantastic story.

Reviewer: ImDownHere Signed [Report This]
Date: June 12 2007 7:43 PM Title: Chapter One: You are your own worst enemy

I really like the way this is going...please continue adding to it

Reviewer: deviant Signed [Report This]
Date: April 07 2007 1:25 PM Title: Chapter One: You are your own worst enemy

Hey, finally another update.  Hope you keep going.

Author's Response: I plan too. I already have invested this much time into it. May as well see it till the end.

Reviewer: DX Machina Signed [Report This]
Date: February 06 2007 4:21 PM Title: Chapter One: You are your own worst enemy

See, I had a feeling there was a good explanation...

Reviewer: DX Machina Signed [Report This]
Date: January 18 2007 10:21 PM Title: Chapter One: You are your own worst enemy

Interesting twist...looking forward to more.


Author's Response: wow, thanks DX The fact you are even reading this story is an honor to me. Your one of the reasons i even started writing anything. I never enjoyed writing until i read some of your stories.

Reviewer: Ronnie Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 01 2007 4:07 AM Title: Chapter One: You are your own worst enemy

great story, I love the voyeur aspect to it, it adds a lot of suspense.

Author's Response: thanks ronnie, I have always been a voyuer fan myself, so its easy to write what you like.

Reviewer: Vord Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: December 25 2006 11:53 PM Title: Chapter One: You are your own worst enemy

Liking it, liking it......

Author's Response: thanks, I am really surprised by the success of this story. I started out writing as just a throwaway story to prepare myslef for a story im writing for cassadria.

Reviewer: billyevil Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 23 2006 6:12 PM Title: Chapter One: You are your own worst enemy

really fun stuff so far man.. this last update really was cool.. i'm glad you decided to write this story.. i hope to hear more! :)

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