Reviewer: White Wolf Signed [Report This]
Date: October 15 2015 1:40 PM Title: Getting out of Dodge

Got through the whole thing in less than a day.  Definitely ranks as one of the very best on the site, IMO.  Good differentiation of personalities, pretty good realism in character actions, not to heavy on exposition.  Also appreciated the Mini, Gentle (mostly) themes, as they are uncommon on this site. Great work!  I'll be coming back to this one in the future for sure.

However, I just had two relatively small nits: 1. There is a decent amount of inconsistency in the sizes of women's bodies/features as described in the text with respect to the stated heights.  E.g. a 13' woman with 4' breasts, a 15' woman who is able to encircle a 6' man's chest with a single hand.  Especially in the latter parts of the story, some of the descriptions of features relative to the size of the male protag seemed more appropriate for women in the 20'+ range. 

2. Understanding that there is a follow on story (albeit one that doesn't appear to pick up where the first left off), the ending still felt abrupt.

Neither of these significantly distracted from the story though.  This one is a true gem.  Thanks for sharing it.  

Author's Response:

Thanks for the feedback!

1) I'll try to do a full read through looking for size-discrepancies... I try to catch this stuff, but it's hard to catch everything.

2) I think the ending feels abrupt because there wasn't enough conflict leading up to it.. It just feels like "chris going home" rather than something that had been brewing for a while. -- The follow-up story (Rashja Blossoms) does pick up right where Goddess Resort ends.... Chris goes home, and we get to see his life at home. However, there are only a few characters from Goddess Resort who appear in the sequel.

Reviewer: Nostory Signed [Report This]
Date: October 12 2015 9:00 PM Title: Getting out of Dodge

Great, now I can read it and know where I left off!