[Report This]Date: September 21 2015 6:43 PM Title: Lunch with Addison
Interesting. Definitely a departure from what I'd envisioned with the knife bending thing, but I like it! I think it would be good to add an explanation of 'glimmer' at some point since I don't think it was mentioned in my original story. I do like the name for it tho, has an 'enchanting' connotation. I also like the way you portrayed Addison. I like how she explained the altruistic intentions of Ascended, i.e., they're intelligent enough to know the benefit of healing and the value of sharing their male partners to survival of their race in general. Jealousy in the classic sense doesn't exist in the same way. Kissing is held in higher esteem as something shared for true intimacy since healing (i.e., sex) serves other more critical functions beyond intimacy/pleasure.
Write more please! :)
Author's Response:
The 'power within' concept was born out of my desire to make the advantage that induced acendants have take a tangible part in the story, rather than Luna just "being passively smarter". This is what happened in chapter 1 with Luna and her moment of focus / intellect.
However, I didn't want the 'power within' (might need a better name) to be exclusive to induced (or exclusive to intellect), since that seemed too weird. Thus the 2-3% of women who cultivate their inner connection (i think of it as a zen/enlightenment thing)
Combine this with my desire to find some way to make Addison unique, and I decided she needed to have access to this rare gift, especially for strength. This explains why she's a police officer, and why she's such a 'catch' for a sexpot like Regan. It also expains how Addison is really the alpha among them, even if she doesn't always seem it. (though who knows how that will change now that Luna's induced!)
Date: September 21 2015 9:53 AM Title: Lunch with Addison
Sorry could you include more spaces between paragraphs ? A bit difficult to read. Other than that, great chapter! Never knew ascended women had ESP at all but its awesome! Luna is also just about discovering the full extent of her new body. Cannot wait to see more from you.
Author's Response:
Oops. The posting tool ate my paragraphs for ch2/3. Fixed now.
Luna's experience isn't supposed to be ESP, it's just supposed to be vastly heightened focus and intellect.