Reviewer: DARK WRITTER Signed [Report This]
Date: October 07 2015 7:44 PM Title: Chapter 10

Funny you should mention that about paranoia.  With one of my current stories {Jack In Her Ass} I have two ways to take it.  One way, everyone will comment I'm a, well let's just say a jerk.  The other way, more conventional for this site I guess.

 

Perhaps I could write both and let readers decide the ending they prefer.  Be interesting to twist the two, let me think on this one.

 

Oh, glad you took my attention to your story as the compliment it's intended.

 

As far as Silke being one of the Graces like I mentioned, that would be awkward to have her brother a victim; that is of course if he were actually a victim and simply didn't find out about the Graces powers and beg to belong to one of them.  In which case it's an act of mercy.  All this even assuming Silke could be one of them or Mo's not paranoid.

 

I really like how you kept so many alleyways open and the suspence building.

Author's Response:

If I can keep people guessing then it helps build suspense and sustain interest. I think in many ways a forum like this allows people to engage one another and help refine storytelling skills. Still waiting on yours btw :)

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: October 06 2015 1:50 AM Title: Chapter 10

The hand on the shoulder was probably the only thing of suspense that I have guessed correctly. Then again, it was kind of obvious.

So Ms. Mackenzie knows the Graces. The way she looked at them tells me that they are like business partners. I think all 3 of them are actually holding a tiny man on or inside them. Perhaps they are going to play with them or possibly exchange them.

Holy shit. Since I'm Tom and if I'm really in Kimber's breast, that's awesome. However, if I get exchanged to Ms. Mackenzie, then that's heaven in my book. I hope that happens!

Why did Ms. Mackenzie say to "join" her? This means that she was already doing something and these girls are going to get involved with it as well. It's probably a giantess threesome or a group giantess sex party. That's the only solution that I can think of. These girls could not possibly be in detention. Nah, it has to be some sort of event. Girls only. In addition, Elisha smiled upon entering the room. It's gotta be true.

"Why don't you run along". I love your wording! The way she said that hints that she is telling Morris to run! Well, that's what Mo understands. To us readers, it seems more playful, and shows her control of her students. She told Mo to run, while she told the Graces to join. Controlling, but suggestive! Excellent!

Haha! Mo thinks the graces will shrink Ms. Mackenzie! Yeah right! If there is one thing I learned from your stories is that every sexy woman in a story becomes the giantess. I found it interesting that I didn't even think Ms. Mackenzie was in any danger, but Mo thought of it. Good awareness of what Mo must be feeling. If I wrote this chapter, I would've never thought of it. Mo had a thought about becoming the hero. Well, he doesn't even know what he's up against. Smart move that he ran away.

Let's take a detour and envision the position of Tom. He shrinks, Kim, sexy girl, picks him up and puts him in her shirt. Now he is snug in her boob. Now she takes him in a room with her sexy friend Elisha and the sexy teacher of Ms. Mackenzie. Imagine the conversations! Imagine the feelings that Tom is experiencing. He might get laid in there. Perhaps it will be the best thing that happened in his life. (This is all speculation, but just imagine!)

Hey, look. I haven't seen someone talk about the "fight or flight" response in a while. I agree, if I was in Mo's position, I would probably run too. However, since I have my fantasies, I might just go back to Ms. Mackenzie's room and sneak a peak in the door's window. I may get to see something amazing. Or they spot me and bring me in. Then they punish me. Wow, this is exciting.

Silks is a messenger. She's the Grace's scout, letting them know about Tom, sly and Mo. Look at her excuses about where Sly was. Doctor's appointment? Pfft. She made that shit up. She doesn't know about Tom, yeah right. I bet she knows that Kimber is basically using forced breast feeding on Tom or something like that.

How does Silke say "I haven't seen Tom all day" and then smile? That seems sketchy. Mo needs to figure this thing out before things get out of hand.

Uh oh. Silke trying to connect Mo with Elisha. And now she makes him get in her car! It's a trap! Don't do it! (He's probably going to do it.)

So, is Mo about to tell Silke about everything? That's not good because then Silke will tell Elisha about it. After all, we know Elisha and Silke hang out together.

Are they going to Silke's house? What if the Grafes show up? Mo would find himself in a pickle real fast.

We got hints of giantess action thanks to Kimber. Perhaps it's time for the big reveal!

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Sthanks for the review tom, as always great to hear from you. this story is fast approaching the point of the reveal, the Graces will only toy with him for so long. Yeah who knows what going on with silke, right? Or Ms. Mackenzie? is she, isn't she? Oh wait, I know ;)

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: October 05 2015 6:51 PM Title: Chapter 10

This is REALLY getting good, I can't wait for more! I'm really glad Ms.Mackenzie is okay, I'd really like her to get her hands on Morris when he's tiny, but if she is shrunken or gets eaten or crushed, that idea goes down the toilet...

Author's Response:

It is definitely starting to heat up, I don't think we've seen the last of Ms. Mackenzie, ;)