[Report This]Date: September 28 2015 11:31 PM Title: Chapter 8
The suspense is unreal!
We know they both got shrunk! If there's a chance, it happened!
Since Tom is my guy, I hope he's not dead yet. Would be interesting if that teacher played with him. Ah what am I talking about, he's probably already swallowed down. Lol.
Last man standing. Morris, what are you going to do.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Lol, there will definitely be more about Sly and Tom, but not yet, :)
Date: September 28 2015 6:56 PM Title: Chapter 8
Both Tom and Sly gone, NICE! These girls remind me of seals and dolphines playing with their live prey.
When he dreamed of a brunette, I was curious if it was Elisha. Not that we know if it was yet; but a quick reference to last night {e.g. "Did you like exploring my body?" or pointing to her crotch and whispering "Lightning Bolt"} or will Mo notice her fragrance is the same as his room was last night?
So have Tom and Sly been shrunk or transformed? Will the Graces play more mind games, perhaps catching his attention when no one else is looking, pulling out a shrunken person and playing with them or sitting where he can see them in the lunch room as they swallow more.
Will Mo get stoned and drift off in a haze onlt to see and feel where/what Tom and Sly are?
Great as always.
Author's Response:
Exactly like seals, savoring the play almost as much as the take down, heightening the experience. More revealed next chapter, starts twisting and opening other scenarios. We'll see how the Graces take their torment to the next level
[Report This]Date: September 28 2015 6:31 PM Title: Chapter 8
you know, thinking about it many would assume that chapters containing roughly 1000 words per chapter would be hardly worth reading and less engaging. But going over all your works, you've somehow managed to produce a very effective style out if it. Every chapter is brief yet still well detailed. If anything its clever as the brief paragraphs of action and content always lead off on a quick and effective cliff-hanger leaving the reader hungry for more. And luckily since the word count isn't too demanding for you, you're able to update it so frequently that it becomes a rewarding series to keep following. It's brilliant. You are an impressive writer sir xD
as for this chapter and the one prior, excellent! Tom's perdicament totally called it but wasn't let down at all. Hell I found it clever how you introduced his situation via dream-sequence. Coincidental or do these girls have some magical genes in their blood there :D
I'm also loving the mounting tension now as the impending victim is slowly becoming more aware of the slowly tightening noose around his neck
Author's Response:
Thanks for the compliment about my writing! Tension is certainly beginning to mount and there aqre many different possibilities to consider. We'll see how these girls are able to do what they do fairly soon. Hope i can keep your interest piqued!
[Report This]Date: September 28 2015 5:53 PM Title: Chapter 8
These chicks are sociopaths! They just murdered a guy and are going about their business like nothing happened and are even threatening this poor guy who just happened to witness it all. I can't say I don't fear for Morris, I get the feeling he's not far off from ending on the chopping block himself! Great chapter, I especially liked the scene when Elisha pressed herself up against him while lewdly threatening him.
Author's Response:
Vain creatures with access to a lot of power. Brutal combination! Elisha, sassy little minx isn't she?
[Report This]Date: September 28 2015 4:55 PM Title: Chapter 8
The plot thickens...
Author's Response:
Muwahaha, the chain is getting shorter