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Reviewer: iHategiants666 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 27 2015 7:58 AM Title: PROLOGUE

Hi. Remember me?

 

Just wanted to get several things cleared up so I'm not constantly waiting for the next chapter.

First, did POTUS get airborne before Kelly even arrived? And if so, where's he headed?

 

Secondly, about Ms Hanson's quest. Do you plan to focus several chapters solely on her intentionally/unintentionally flattening houses and helpless victims to demonstrate her increased inhumanity? That might be an interesting point to bring up. She may not even think of humans as lifeforms any more.

Thirdly, does Casey want revenge on Kelly for humiliating her? Assuming she finds a way to increase her size, will she intend to eliminate Kelly so she doesn't threaten her position as number one?

Fourthly, what about Lisa? Is she more focused on stopping Casey or Kelly? Granted Casey is more unstable and unpredictable, but with Kelly's new power, she might be a greater threat to the human race. Does Lisa have any plan what to do with Kelly if she stops her. Would she be willing to kill her? Perhaps that be an internal conflict.

Fifthly, what about Ron and Dr Mendel? Have they found anything useful through the analysis of Kelly's blood or whatever? Any progress on a permanent antidote or explanation for their near-invulnerability? I'd like to know about their status every now and then.

Lastly, and most importantly, do you have a fixed ending for this story? Or are you going to change things based on reviews? You already know how I feel about this story but do you have in mind.

 

Thank you for taking your time to read this exhausting reply. Answer only if you see fit.

 

Oh... and are you posting two chapters a week? Or just one?



Author's Response:

Of course I remember you :)

One thing I can tell you: your reviews are the most original ones. As I believe I told you in some of my previous replies, I really enjoy them. And I think that I improved some things in Volume 3 based on them. I can also tell you that I don't expect you will like everything, but I think that you already expected that as well :P 

Anyway, I hope that you continue letting me know what you think regularly. I will try to give you my most candid answers; as always, though, without spoilers.

Now, going to your questions and comments:

1. POTUS got airborne when things in Hollner got out of control (after Kelly grew the second time). The Secret Service decided to move him out of security then. He is not heading anywhere in the short term, but you will see in future chapters that at some point the government has decided that the West Coast is probably the best destination for evacuations

2. I intend to have many chapters focused on Kelly at her new size. And if I did a decent job to have my intentions well represented, these chapters should clearly show Kelly's evolution and also how her view of the world and its people keeps on changing

3. Yes, Casey is really mad at Kelly. Not being the one on top and having been humiliated by Kelly was very frustrating for her. In the coming chapters you will see that her intentions in case she can increase her size will not be gentle towards Kelly.

4. Lisa is incredibly concerned both about Kelly and Casey. Your definition on why both of them should worry someone with a gentle heart like Lisa is accurate. The problem for Lisa is that she does not really know what to do about any of the two. A second problem is that Lisa is gentle but she is not incredibly smart and she is not very imaginative. I won't be able to answer your questions in detail since I would be spoiling some of the very next chapters, but let me tell you that Lisa will follow the "easy obvious path" and that her reactions from then onwards will be driven by what she finds in the way.

5. I will definitely cover what Ron and Mendel are up to. However, I'm afraid that you will need to wait several chapters for that. The flash of Ron and Mendel in the epilogue of Vol. 2 won't happen for a while. Timing wise, in the prologue of Vol. 3 Kelly has left Hollner less than an hour ago and has just destroyed the FSD. So, Ron is still trapped in the tower where she put him and Mendel has just been evacuated from the FSD. They will need some time to get to a new research location and get back to work. Once they do, I will try to explain what they do and what they find out (and hopefully the pseudo-scientific story I've made up will make some sense :P)

6. I have a fixed ending for the story. The entire story is written already. What I do every week is proof read and polish the chapters a little before posting. I will not change anything significant about the storyline based on reviews (but I definitely use the feedback for future stories)

I posted two chapters last week because it was basically a full chapter and the prologue. But I will post a single chapter every week from now on. They are not going to be short chapters, in any case. Using the complete draft I have right now, the story is 113K long, the shortest chapter is 4K words and there are a couple of chapters that are almost 9K long.

As I said, I'd appreciate your reviews and I would appreciate it it you keep letting me know what you think.

Cheers!

Reviewer: officerkc Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 22 2015 9:09 PM Title: Chapter 1. Starting Over

Kelly has gone a little (or a lot) crazy with power. Love it :)



Author's Response:

Well, I already commented a little bit about this in a review below. Kelly has definitely evolved with her new size, and not to be gentler. There will be plenty of chapters focused on Kelly and her antics at her new size in this story, so I believe that you will enjoy her.

Cheers!

Reviewer: officerkc Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 22 2015 9:07 PM Title: PROLOGUE

Yay so glad this story is back!



Author's Response:

Thank you! I hope that the story will not disappoint you!

Cheers!

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: August 22 2015 3:41 PM Title: Chapter 1. Starting Over

Kelly has really gone overboard, I wonder how anyone is supposed to take her down? If it were up to me, id send in a couple of people into her ear and put a bomb in there. At this point Kelly is so big that attacking her internally is the only option. Anyway great chapter, to say im looking forward to updates on this story would be an understatement!



Author's Response:

Yes, she has. And I'm afraid that her size will get into her head into an even bigger way. She was already quite a megalomaniac... so now that she is way bigger and that she has been attacked at a much larger scale, her evolution won't be to a gentler person. Her character and behavior will still be very different to the one Casey would have had if she had been the one to grow to that size. Casey is a sadistic sociopath, Kelly is a megalomaniac with a sense of purpose.

Of course, at her new size, it will be much harder to take her down. This doesn't mean that people won't try, of course. Your suggestion makes sense, but I'm not sure if it is very easy to iplement. As long as Kelly is awake and moving, getting someone in her ear unnoticed will be almost impossible. And I think that while she is massive, her size is still not big enough so that this would be an easy to implement plan even when she is sleeping.... Anyway, next week's chapter will be the first Kelly focused chapter in the story. You will see a little more about her evolution and the way she thinks.

I'm glad you liked the beginning of the story. I hope that the rest will live up to your expectations. The draft of the complete story I have right now is 113K words, which is 30K words longer than Volume 2. So, there is Volume 3 for a while.

BTW, I believe Lisa is your favorite character. While she does not have the same screen time as Kelly or Casey, I believe there will be some chapters focused on her that you will enjoy.

Cheers!

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