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Reviewer: angeloflife Signed [Report This]
Date: October 25 2015 2:09 PM Title: Chapter 10. Ascension

Its not a bad story to say but its just your normal everyday giantess story, kill me i get bigger, i want to take over the world, growth only works on females man that has been over used, nothing wrong with some male growth if done right.

Casey and Kelly will be dead by now, so far the only wepon they used on them is hellfire missiles that are more for light weight armor, they don't even need manmed aircraft to fire at these girls and for manned aircraft they don't need to be as close they are.

They haven't even started to used the heavy stuff on them yet, i don't care how big and strong theey have gotten they are still flesh and bone peopel they can have their heads blown clean off and never knew what hit them.

You really have no idea to how the U.S really works, its like my saying i know how another country runs , but trust me as soon as these girls started wecking shit the military would be on them not with men on the ground most likely from high flying aircraft miles up in the air.

Also its not that easy to take over the U.S as easy as Kelly did, she is not even close to being in charge of anything, President and his men are still alive, taking out a few buildings dosen't make her in charge and going for the U.N thats not going to do anything for the other countries, the leaders are not even in there.

All its showing is just out of her mind Kelly is, if she is as smart as you make her why is she just a stripper, she could have gone to school or got a better job than showing and shaking her tits for drunken males.

Lisa has taken a big back seat in this part of the story, she is not around most of the time and has the lest amout of screen time of any of the girls, she is just as much as a player in this as the other two.

Its been a back and forth match between Kelly and Casey, its getting to feel too drawn out, Casey is smash kill eat smash kill, Kelly is smash kill smash with a very little plan.

How about bringing some of the other characters into play now its been long enough and its getting old.



Author's Response:

Well, first of all, thanks for the feedback. I appreciate criticism even when I may not agree with just everything it's said. I've introduced some changes (I don't know if improvements, since this is not for me to judge) from similar feedback in the past. Actually, your feedback is quite in line with that from "IHateGiants666" (not sure if you have read some of his comments) and I can tell you that I appreciate his reviews.

Now, let me try to answer to some of your remarks:

- I don't know if you have read the entire series so far or if you started just with Volume 3. I tried to explain the reason why Kelly ended up being a stripper (I'm not sure if successfully). In Volume 1, Kelly was a college student back at her hometown after her first year in College. She used to be the hottest girl in High School, but she was quite smart as well and she was not doing bad at all in College. After accidentally growing and taking a background role while Casey wroke havoc in town and Lisa tried to stop her, Kelly's life becomes miserable. She is not the hero Lisa became and while she is not a villain that deserves being sent to prison (like Casey), everything with her life goes wrong: she fights with her father, her townmates hate her for having become a giant, she gets sued for some of the things she did while she was big, she gets expelled from College... her life goes worse and worse and she ends up far away from her hometown and working as a stripper, using her body, since everything else she has failed. It's at that point where the FSD finds out that whatever made the girls grow was still active and decide to bring Kelly back for testing. At that point, a concatenation of events make her grow (and that's when the action of Volume 2 starts). So, while Kelly is not a genious, there is an explanation for the fact that she is smart and she ends up working as a stripped. I actually invested quite a lot of time to write her backstory in Volume 2.

- I never pretended my story to be anything else than a giantess story. That's the reason I'm posting it here... I'm trying to make it as good as my limited ability allows me, and some people seem to be enjoying it, according to the feedback I'm getting. To me, making the story as good as I can is trying to give it a background and a storyline that feels logical and to develop the characters enough. Now, I know that I cannot expect everyone to like what I do (either because they do not like the particular genre I chose or because they think I did not do the job right for that particular genre), but honestly, I've got a reception that is way more positive than I could have expected, and I've been very encouraged by it.

- Of course there is nothing wrong with male growth. It's just not my cup of tea. Some of the story ideas I have involve "some" male growth but I find that I cannot get as motivated by the topic so I invariable end up chosing the storylines that get me more inspired for the stories I end up developping.

- I know that the military has not yet used everything they have on Kelly. There is still plenty of the story left and there will be further attempts. Of course, the US Government is not yet defeated, either. I never said they surrendered (it's just Kelly that considers that she has completely seized power). The same applies for the potential effectiveness of her visit to the UN. I guess you'll need to wait until she gets there to see what happens, but I think that expecting that the world leaders are not going to surrender to her is very logical :)

I believe that your complaint, which is logical, comes from two things: on one hand the timeline of the story is shorter than what the story extension could suggest. It has been barely a little more than half a day since Kelly and Casey grew to 250 feet in height in Hollner and even less since Kelly became 1,700 feet tall. The military has not yet had time to put together a proper response using the right tools (as the cabinet discussion suggests). They will eventually do it and as I've repeated in parts of the story (in the mouth of other characters), I would never expect the people to surrender to a threat like Kelly. The reason she has been successful so far has been that she has got way much powerful than anyone could expect and she has moved very quickly, not letting the army time to react before she has beheaded their structure of command (which was quite a lucky move for her, since she had not really planned it).

I admit that I am not an expert in the details of how the US Government works. I doubt many US citizens or film makers are experts either... my depiction never intended to be "documentary-like" accurate, but just to support the story. Some TV shows like 24 or some books (e.g. "The sum of all fears" by Tom Clancy) also describe the issues in the chain of command when those that have to give the orders are overwhelmed by the situation. Of course, the writers of these shows/books are much better at their jobs than me and have done a much better job of describing the situation.

Now, I believe that the biggest part of your complain is that the characters you could actually empathize with (Lisa, Ron, others?) have not had too much time in the story so far. I have discussed this with some people that gave me some really deep and good feedback about the story and I have to admit that you are right: I did not invest enough time to keep the characters that are the "hero" type and that should have been the protagonists of the story in the highlights. I actually intend Ron and Lisa to be very important in this story and they will have more screen time in the second half of Volume 3 (since their role is actually key in how the story will evolve and finish), but I underused them for maybe too long. I may have invested too long in describing the actions of the characters that are antagonists, probably because of two reasons: first, I really wanted to explain Kelly's evolution as power makes her delusional and turns her into an antagonist she was not in Volume 2. Second: I have probably not balanced the story development with the pure giantess content in this first part of Volume 3.

As I mentioned, I intend to make the story evolve in a logical way and to have the characters that have not been important yet become important in the end. I know that the weekly publication pace may generate some frustration, as you may perceive the story is going in a different direction from the one you would like.

I'd like to ask you to have some patience until the end.

I'd appreciate your comments in future chapters in any case. 

Thanks again for taking the time to let me know what you think!

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: October 24 2015 6:41 PM Title: Chapter 10. Ascension

Great Chapter!

We got more of Kelly's god-complex ridden godzilla fare but more than that we got some great interaction between her and tinies! I just want to point out that even though I'm saying that Kelly is behaving as I would expect doesn't mean that I find these chapters boring or anything because of it. Maybe they are getting a bit boring for me because there isn't any real conflict right now, Kelly is basically a walking force of nature so there's no power that can provide a decent fight and THAT is probably what is making the chapters a bit dull for me, not Kelly's behavior per-se. Any army the US or anyone else sends out we can expect to be creamed by Kelly without any effort and the other giantesses are simply no match for her as she is right now.

Also, I just think that at this point the characters in your story have established personalities and even the so called "wild card" that is Kelly has basically found her niche and probably isn't going to change much (personality wise) from here on out. Lisa is the hero with a vengeance, Casey is the psychopath who only cares about killing and having fun and Kelly is the ambitious villian trying to take over the world; established personalities. The more personal interaction with tinies helps to make things more interesting for me though, so I hope we get more of that in the future!

Anyway I'm looking forward to the next one, it was a good chapter no doubt!



Author's Response:

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter. To me, the interaction between the giant women and the tinies is the most important element of the story.

It's true that right now Kelly is a force of such magnitude that it seems no one is able to face her with a minimal chance of success. That's the position I wanted to put her in for the set-up of this third volume. One of the "mysteries" of the second half of Volume 3 will be to know if she can actually be opposed or not. 

It's true that one of the differences between Volume 2 and Volume 3 is that Kelly, which used to be the "wild card" has now a well established personality. I'd say that she is still more unpredictable than the other two, but her agenda is now clear: to take over the world. Having said that, I agree with your description of the women's personalities. 

You will get plenty more interaction between all the giantesses and the tinies, including quite a lot of Kelly. I hope that you will enjoy it!

Cheers!

Reviewer: edexdexx Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 24 2015 9:44 AM Title: Chapter 10. Ascension

The makings of World War III is underway. Lisa vengeance fueled looking to increase her size for revenge. Casey looking to get bigger to go unopposed and make the world her playground even worse now that she's abandoned all regard for human life, disregarding the cannibalism of eating them. Kelly's god-complex is in full swing looking for global conquest. I know she's probably expecting a little resistance, but I think her little problems are going to start creeping up on her in more ways than she's imagining. Then you even got the prospect of Mandy looking to get bigger.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the feedback! I hope that you are enjoying the story and the direction it's taking.

Let me say something about your review: it's true, there are plenty of people that want to get bigger and each of them have their own agenda:

- Kelly is already big enough. Her new size and power have brought her god-complex to its zenith and in her mind there is no other logical conclusion to the situation than world domination. She does not want any more size or power. She cannot even imagine that anyone can get remotely close to challenge her and she knows that getting bigger will make it much harder to interact with the little people she wants to rule. As you say, she is expecting a certain degree of resistance, but she cannot even think on anything that she should not be able to defeat easily.

- Lisa did not want to get big from the start. She has always been freaked out at being a giantess. But now she is so mad with hate and the desire for vengeance that she would do anything to hurt Kelly. She knows that this means getting bigger, even if she has not yet thought on what she would do afterwards.

- Casey, as you say, has no more regard for human life. She just cares about enjoying and having finally let her inner sadism go out all the way, this means using the world as a playground (like you say) where the toys invariably get destroyed. This enough would make Casey want to get bigger, since the bigger she gets the more destruction she can cause. The fact that she needs some extra size to be able to face Kelly made her want to get bigger right away.

- Finally, Mandy has some of Casey's genes running through her blood. It's hard to tell if she would be another Casey or a combination of Casey and Kelly, but if she gets to grow it won't be good news for the rest of the world

So, we have four women with an agenda that involves getting bigger... but this does not mean that they will be able to get what they want. Let me say something about Side Effects: I made up some (weak) pseudo-science to try to explain the reason behind the growths. As flimsy as it may be, I plan on sticking to it for the rest of the story. This means that if someone wants to grow there are certain things that have to happen.

Now, I know that I have not clarified anything of what will happen (it was on purpose), but let me tell you that I enjoy reading what other people think the direction of the story will be. First and foremost, I get some good ideas from this. And I have to admit that I also enjoy it because when people speculate about what will happen I interpret it as an evidence that I have been able to create a setting, a collection of characters and a storyline that are solid enough for that (I hope that I'm not overinterpreting this in a too favorable way for myself... ;) )

Anyway, thanks again for the feedback and please, keep letting me know what you think. Getting feedback is the main reward I get at writing and posting this story!

Cheers! 

Reviewer: Nostory Signed [Report This]
Date: October 24 2015 7:35 AM Title: Chapter 10. Ascension

 I loved it, crushing the US government to dictating her plans that only made her hornier and hornier until she even considered screwing the man in her palm, it will be wonderful to see how she goes on from here!



Author's Response:

Thank you! This was an important chapter in the story. As I mentioned last week, Casey's chapter and this chapter changed the pace of the story from a very long introduction to the real bulk of Volume's 3 storyline.

And Kelly did almost everything on this chapter, as you mentioned: physical dominance first, projection of power an authority later and realization of how much of a turn on her situation is to finish.

I'm happy to see that you enjoyed it. Hopefully you will like the evolution of the story and the characters from here onwards.

Cheers!

Reviewer: officerkc Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 24 2015 7:24 AM Title: Chapter 10. Ascension

Wahhhh its going to be insane waiting until next week! So many of these stories see just destruction but this is taking it further. The teases were amazing BTW. Ahh can't wait for next week!!!



Author's Response:

Well, I guess that having you eager to see next week's chapters is one of the highest forms of praise I can get, so thank you! I need to admit that it also makes me feel a little bad that I cannot release chapters quicker... I guess that the weekly pace is a good enough compromise.

I'm glad that you enjoyed the teases as well. I really enjoy writing Kelly and she got more interesting as a character the more I wrote about her. I hope that you'll like the rest of the story (in her story arc). Not everything will be teasing, of course.

Cheers!

Reviewer: Macro_Rebecca Signed [Report This]
Date: October 24 2015 7:19 AM Title: Chapter 10. Ascension

I'm very interested to see how things with Kelly progress. She seems like she has some decent ideas, and it is very refreshing to see a giantess of her size actually doing something constructive with their size and power instead of just mindlessly destroying things.

 

 

And I am very interested to see how she deals with the other two, or if they might become bigger problems then she thinks they are.

 



Author's Response:

Thanks! Kelly does have decent ideas and she has big plans for the world. She definitely sees herself as a positve force thing for humanity. Of course, that contrasts with her methods and the delusional state she has got into. Trying to explore this balance and Kelly's constant evolution is one of the most interesting aspects of writing Side Effects and especially this volume 3.

Casey and Lisa will also have an important role in what remains of the story (about half of it), of course.

I'll be very interested to read what you think about the progress of the story. Please, let me know as I release new chapters. 

Cheers!

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