[Report This]Date: July 18 2019 1:00 AM Title: It Wasn't Me
Great descriptions and actions however the plot seems rather contrived and there are a lot of things that most likely should be left out. For example, if you establish a character to be "the only one paying attention" and then later you make it so that he forgot it he wasn't really paying attention. Furthermore, when the teacher asks what's her face about if she was the one who was throwing things, the part when she said "he looked at his friends and said 'watch this!'" seems a bit unnecessary as you already establish the MC as a character who's clearly a loner loser. Furthermore the adding of unnecessary details like "only a female teachers can enact the punishment" makes this school seem like a sexist female supremacist school. And why does EVERYONE need extra credit? It seems like throughout the story the only motive any of the characters had for torturing the MC. "Man, I'm getting a bad grade. Better torture someone for an easy A." As negative as I'm being I really enjoy your stories however a lot of your plot lines seem deliberately forced. And I get it. I love action as much as the next person but I think plot just as important. Overall I'd say the story is a solid 6.4/10
Author's Response:
I appreciate the in-depth review. This criticism allows me to get better at writing. TBH I kind of like the irrationality of it all, which is why it doubles down in this story in particular, but as a general theme in my stories (except Research). I think generally speaking this particular fetish is already irrational. Most of this would never happen. If a person gets shrunk, they'll probably either die or be taken to the hospital. So you already have to suspend your disbelief just to start reading. And people behaving in particularly irrational yet cruel ways is just playing this out to the max. I do get that it's not everyone's thing, which is why I started "Research". But in general, I love me my tropes.
Date: August 09 2017 7:07 PM Title: It Wasn't Me
Thank you for this story! (and for credit). I am glad my story inspired you. You write better than I do. Keep up the good work.
[Report This]Date: July 07 2016 4:05 PM Title: It Wasn't Me
This is exactly what I've been looking for. You're becoming one of my favorite authors on this page. Thank you so much for all of your stories. There may not be a lot, but I'll take quality over quantity any day.
[Report This]Date: June 24 2016 10:59 PM Title: It Wasn't Me
Love it and want more like this.
Date: June 22 2016 10:56 PM Title: It Wasn't Me
Your work is always great to read! Thank you for deciding to finish this one afterall!
Also seems like one of your more merciful works :P Adam only has to endure this for a year. Most of your protags usually end up stuck for life if not longer.
Author's Response:
Oh don't worry. I've got an idea for another story. That one's going to be a doozy.
[Report This]Date: June 22 2016 9:10 PM Title: It Wasn't Me
Said many times you are one of the best here, and you keep proving it!!! Hope to see more from
You!!!!
Author's Response:
Thank you!
[Report This]Date: June 03 2016 3:45 PM Title: It Wasn't Me
I just love the detailing you do! Also your writing style is just amazing!!! Please continue this story! You are one of the best authors FT!
Date: August 19 2015 1:53 AM Title: It Wasn't Me
Is there any reason you don't intend to finish this? Is it a general lack of writing muse, or is it a lack of ideas? You don't need a massively long story afterall, and the way you have set this up, it seems you could probably finish it in one or two more chapters.
[Report This]Date: August 17 2015 6:22 AM Title: It Wasn't Me
Starting out strong. I'm loving this.