[Report This]Date: September 02 2015 5:14 PM Title: Chapter 12
As always, good story, Duggernaut.
A few typos. Could have used a little more proof reading.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the heads up, cleaned up the typos. It's funny, I go through them, seems okay, then I'll give it a read and WTF? Thanks for reading the story and sharing a review. I shall endeavor to be more vigilant - sloppy writing detracts from an otherwise good tale, :)
[Report This]Date: August 31 2015 8:12 PM Title: Chapter 12
In the second sentence, you said Barley when I bet you meant barely.
Hmmm. Lots of planning going on. Looks like a showdown coming up.
You know, this story is kinda reaching that 'complicated' stage. Now we got all these people and this goddess, a mother who doesnt care for her daughter, a father who does but is seen as the enemy, we got these friends of Anna that have parents that know about this. Man, all this is going on and Anna is the pig ready to be slaughtered.
"Yo Darlene, your daughter is going to be bound and will die, tonight". Darlene's response "Yes!"
Lol wtf Darlene.
Sometimes I like to picture Anna is a kid with a nuclear device inside her. Her father is trying to dig inside her trying to find it without killing her. Her mother and her goons want to capture Anna, kill her, and get this device.
Reminds me of some batman stuff. Adam is batman, the detective is robin, and together they hunt down....um Darlene(Selene(cat woman)) with her pawns. Now this story sounds more fun. :)
Good stuff, I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Next chapter GTS action a whole of cat and mouse all during a tense standoff!
Date: August 31 2015 6:33 PM Title: Chapter 12
Holy fuck. That was intense!
Author's Response:
Only going to get tense! ? More tense?