[Report This]Date: May 26 2016 11:49 AM Title: Chapter 8
This is not the type of story I usually find of interest, BUT, I find it the type of story that needs to be told more frequently. You have incorporated several different themes that are currently among the sadly, but highly publicised and media-broadcast problems in our society. Please keep up the good work!
Author's Response:
This story is atypical of my usual prolonged and character building chapters before we encounter any giantess. It is a very dark and brutal intro and the hope was to provoke readers into finding out why. Using sensitive subject matter to bond my protagonists gave them a commonality beyond the routine teenage drama and allowed them to find others who had endured horrible things.
Date: August 22 2015 12:27 AM Title: Chapter 8
I know the scars are necessary to plot which is why a hand-wave is justifiable but I find it odd that none of the doctors offered Anna any possibility of a skin graft given the severity of her scarring. They just stitch her up and go "LOL sorry your dad strapped you down and cut radical religous symbols into you but you're just gonna have to live with it kid."
I'm just so glad Caleb dies. I know that usually in order to be a dick it's just misplaced anger but goddamn this kid's a class A fuckboy. Going back to chapter 1, it makes me wish he'd suffered more.
Author's Response:
I've re-tooled several chapters to include skin grafting, your feedback was excellent and hopefully now the story is stronger - starting with chapter 4 "The Blade and the Damage Done" through chapter 8 "Homecoming". The next full update should be soon, very soon, the teasing has begun.
[Report This]Date: August 21 2015 10:39 PM Title: Chapter 8
*moans lustfully* God, this plot is all I need in my life...
Author's Response:
Lustful moaning will only encourage me to tease as long as humanly possible before getting to the climax, just an FYI, ;)
Date: August 21 2015 1:05 PM Title: Chapter 8
I loved it!
Still waiting for the gts content though, but I like the plot-building.
[Report This]Date: August 21 2015 9:13 AM Title: Chapter 8
You seem to be updating this story the fastest. Dark stuff is fun to write I guess. :)
Also, what is up with you and the word "scowl"? I see it so often in your stories that I wonder if you got any other synonyms for it. Lol. The word is cool, but you use it a lot.
Wow, this was the best plot driven chapter yet! I learned so much! This chapter could be a story alone. Or at least half of it. We learn about the good guys and the bad guys. We learn how things got bad. We learn who to blame and we feel for those being teased and humiliated. This is great stuff!
Now I know who Jerry is, why Veronica and Valen are important to Anna, and most of all, why Caleb is Anna's worst enemy.
This chapter really helps if anyone is confused with the story. Makes me wonder if this should be chapter 1, or maybe chapter 2 in this case. The violent scene in chapter 1 is an attention grabber and I think that's what made people keep reading and reviewing this story. Good move.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
this story was a little more developed than some of the others I'm working on which is why the more frequent updates - you're making me scowl, kidding, but I'll be a little more self conscious from here on in, thanks for the feedback, as always.