[Report This]Date: April 06 2016 6:57 AM Title: Chapter 19
This is a fine story. One unexpected occurance after another. This will surely be a memory that these boys will never, ever forget! Especially since they get to survive it and remember it all. Excellent. Keep up the good work.
Author's Response:
Lol, agreed, i highly doubt this would somehow slip any of their minds any time soon. Thank you for giving this one a read through and sharing a review. :)
[Report This]Date: August 28 2015 11:51 AM Title: Chapter 19
Why do I suddenly get the feeling that local police have used Simonetta's place as a "Scared Straight" center before? ;-)
[Report This]Date: August 28 2015 3:24 AM Title: Chapter 19
Well without a doubt I can honestly say that this story was absolutely fantastic! :D
It was quite a treat to take a week's absence only to come back and find this story fully loaded with a bunch of new conclusive chapters! ^_^
Overall I liked this very much. I enjoyed how in each chapter the perspective switched evenly between the shrunken men and Simone & her friend. But even more so I was impressed with the creative solutions you were able to write for Dustin in navigating the house at a shrunken scale. Make-shift grappling hooks, climbing the stairs using a straw-beam etc. Very inventive and seldom seen in other shrunken_man senarios. I'd definitely recomend keeping up with shrunken-men using inoventive solutions with future stories :)
Another aspect I liked was definitely those 'playtime' scenes as well and how you seemed to keep each one different for each guy to avoid repetitiveness. With Dustin getting the most descriptive and enjoyable escapade, then John enduring a pleasure/punishment game and finally with Charles having a relatively soft-paced introduction to it which seemed most appropriate for his character :)
So yeah the variance was appreciated too. ^_^
Final thoughts, good story with a good range of content which helped lead up to a satisfactory ending which didn't feel rushed or dragged at all. The story was well paced with only a few parts where I felt that more description could be appreciated (cause I'm a greedy reader like that ^_^;) as for the ending. I liked it :)
Though the police officer's actions have me notably confused about what's supposed to be happening next, leaving me with questions which I wouldn't mind seeing answered in some kind of sequel. *hint*hint* ;)
[Report This]Date: August 27 2015 7:56 PM Title: Chapter 19
What an ending! (You should mark this story as finished then).
This was actually a feel good ending. I like it. In the end, nothing bad happened, the boys got a lesson, and the cop seems to indicate a part2 or something.
Of cousrse the cop knows Simone. Every super hot person in this story knows her and are friends with her. And together, they seduce boys to give themselves pleasure. Freaking genuises!
Haha, Blake missed all the fun. Ending your "simulation" to be stepped on is kinda lame. I think John had the best time, followed by Charles. Then Dustin, and of course Blake is last.
I wonder where Savvannah is taking them...(sequel?) :)
Man, what a great story!
Date: August 27 2015 6:44 PM Title: Chapter 19
Wait, is this the ending?!?! Such a beautiful story I've been following. I'm glad I decided to stick through with it.