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Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 20 2015 2:58 AM Title: Chapter 5

The puzzles pieces are forming a picture. They way you upload both stories seem to be in chronological order. So all the chapters from both stories seem to go in order. This chapter right here continues from both 'the contract and the book.'

So there's the girl that shrunk Oleg, the giantess from the cave, and now Abigail with some strange power in her genes. I feel like a tiny girl will randomly show up soon. While old parts are linked together, new things are forming.

Can Sebastian be trusted? He is the first guy to be shrunk and not get captured.

I'm still interested to see the Charlotte/Oleg relationship. But that can wait. This chapter is important as it links both stories.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

I'm hoping to keep enough original content to keep the stories separate but ceertainly working parallel to one another. Thanks for the feedback

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 19 2015 9:03 PM Title: Chapter 5

The three disparate plot threads begin to interweave.*

*Sorry! I was force-fed a lot of big words in Eng. Lit. 101...and I still regurgitate some of them every so often.

Author's Response:

Trying to thread this story logically while keeping it from getting to muddle or intertwined with The contract.

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 18 2015 1:13 PM Title: Chapter 4

I am really liking this new character of Charlotte. She is very likable and you feel for her after losing a relationship.

Lucky Oleg. First Zara, now Charlotte.

Zara has the force. Thats what all these women remind me of; the jedi from star wars. I know its random, but when people can sense others' presence, and use an ability to control another person, I found it kinda similar. Also their bodies are more enhanced and resistant to drugs and external forces.

The 2 guys died, but Lori lives. First woman that Zara has captured. Could be interesting in the future.

Not much else to say becuase it was clear and made sense.

Im really, really interested im that Charlotte, Oleg relationship. Hopefully, it lasts a long time.

I cant wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 17 2015 5:41 PM Title: Chapter 4

She may have the mind of a terrible two year-old. But, with the body of a supermodel, it shouldn't take too long for Zara to have some lecherous male motorist offering her a lift.

Reviewer: TinyBrad Signed [Report This]
Date: June 13 2015 10:17 PM Title: Chapter 1

I started reading the contract and loved it, but I am one of those guys that hardly ever finishes reading a story, or finish writing one fot that matter. After reading this i need to make it a priority to go back and finish the contract.

I too am eager to see what happened to Oleg, and am hoping he survives. I like him as a character. He seems to be a generally good guy,  the way he tried to help Zara, and you do a good job writing him. I hope we see him and Zara together again.

You're stories are great, keep up the good work buddy.

 

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 13 2015 7:30 AM Title: Chapter 3

For Oleg's sake, I hope one of the items confiscated in the "sanitizing" was the pillow he hid in.

Author's Response:

Nope

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 12 2015 5:45 PM Title: Chapter 3

At first I thought Zara was acting it all out, that she had no idea what a tv was and how to act in society. Shes not acting, she is really clueless.

Zara is horny, eager to learn, and easy to manipulate.

Those guys that tied her up should tape her mouth as well. Otherwise, Zara will perform some spell from her mouth and shrink everyone.

So what happened to Oleg? Is he still behind the pillows? If they searched and sanitized the room, didnt they find him? and what is their reaction? I was anxious to see that unfold.

Things are getting interestting. I cant wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Nobody found Oleg...yet. Zara got zapped and drugged, shouldn't be a problem, right? :)

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 12 2015 1:17 PM Title: Chapter 2

Mysteriouser and mysteriouser!*

I can't wait to see if this will tie in/circle back to the first story. :-)


*With apologies to Lewis Carroll.

Author's Response:

Hi Carycomic, this story is a spin off of the Contract. There may be some cross over, as well there will be an appearance from a character from my other story the Ad. FYI

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 12 2015 12:43 PM Title: Chapter 1

Why do I have the feeling that Vivienne is a Mata Hari for Hilde and Company?

But, even if I'm wrong, this is a very suspenseful start to your parent story. :-)

Author's Response:

I seriously considered making Vivienne one of the women with the power to shrink. I haven't ruled it out,maybe she set Arthur up to bring Zara through. I guess time will tell. :)

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 12 2015 12:29 AM Title: Chapter 2

What the.......!

I never knew the contract could have such a deep background!

I have barely any idea who any of these people are, but some are vanishing so they must be related to the contract, otherwise, its difficult to connect the dots.

Is she the book? A spirit of the book? To be honest, I thought she was a hologram. I was wrong, big time. Arthur created a person, with magic!

Isnt it ironic that usually sex is reauired to make a baby, but in this case, a person is brought into this world (a baby) and that person has sex with the creator and kills it? Amazing.

So people were vanishing before this incident. I thought she was the first giantess to start shrinking people and all the stuff in the contract happened later. I guess not. People were already shrinking.

So can this new girl change sizes, or did she shrunk Arthur? She was 130 ft tall (to arthur), but a small girl to Oleg. I think she shrunk him, like all the other women who have the stone's power.

"strange yellow eyes, naked girl with no identity". Strangest thing Sebastian heard all day.

Now this girl is a threat. (she kinda is one). Even though these tough guys like Oleg think shes weak, think again!

Danger is present, but also hidden in plain sight.

I cant wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Hey Tom, this story takes place on the heels of chapter 17 of the Contract. Same folks that appeared in the hunt used to be here. The Book is a key that opened a pathway from our world to Zara's, for a period of time, the two co-existed in the same space, that's where giant Zara met Arthur. When the deal was finalized with Arthur's passing, the portal closed, pulling Zara from her world into ours and in so doing she was reduced to human sized. she seems innocent and unaware because it has been a long time since she was here last, but she is FAR from it. Contract happened first (and is still happening), this is a thread from that story. I am unsure yet whether or not I will have her as a true giantess, or keep her as is, we'll see. Yellow eyes are to link her to Hilde, Zara and Hilde come from the same background, that will be revealed in yet another story i'm working on. Hope that helps clear up some of the confusion. As always, thank you for your feedback, it is invaluable and helps me see things I've missed. Enjoy!

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