[Report This]Date: June 12 2015 10:09 AM Title: The Novice Witch
I say again that it's nicely refreshing how Michelle is a gentle giantess-witch. Too many similar stories have started out with that promising premise (sorry; alliteration unintended). Only to peter out when they get into some kind of internecine (ALWAYS wanted to use that word!) political intrigue. And, thus, they remain permanently unfinished.*
*Sorry, too, for the mistaken ID.
[Report This]Date: June 12 2015 9:35 AM Title: The Novice Witch
I say again that it's nicely refreshing how Sarah is a gentle giantess-witch. Too many similar stories have started out with that promising premise (sorry; alliteration unintended). Only to peter out when they get into some kind of internecine (ALWAYS wanted to use that word!) political intrigue. And, thus, they remain permanently unfinished.
Author's Response:
Yeah, I wanted to write a normal couple. I see a lot of stories that start out gentle, only for a giantess to take her power a bit too far, and then turn into another dominatrix story. And I think you mean Michelle haha, Sarah is Michelle's cross country friend.
[Report This]Date: June 10 2015 10:48 PM Title: The Novice Witch
That was pretty cool spells. Maybe a durability spell can add flavor to future chapters.
[Report This]Date: June 10 2015 2:18 PM Title: The Novice Witch
Story is going good so far, maybe could use a bit more description of where Isaac is in relation to Michelle at any given time. The conversation in this last chapter played out as if they were both the same size and nothing was out of the ordinary. I understand you were trying to give some exposition on Michelle's power's while moving the story along, but don't forget its a Shrunken man story :)
Author's Response:
Gotcha, I appreciate the feedback. In the later chapters I have written I was a bit more descriptive and I wrote the orientation of the characters better. Hoepfully those improve your opinion on the story! Also, specifically in regards to chapter nine, I wanted it to seem like he wasn't shrunken to show that they are close enough to ignore the elephant in the room.