Date: June 24 2015 5:28 AM Title: An Unexpected Trip
I like chapter 4
[Report This]Date: June 12 2015 9:22 AM Title: An Unexpected Trip
"She's in the money.
Add a shrunken honey.
And, she's got enough
Of what it takes to
Get along."
With apologies to Messrs. Warren and Dubin.
[Report This]Date: June 09 2015 11:03 PM Title: An Unexpected Trip
I don't see what you were worried about. This was more like PG than R...which I don't mind at all.
Author's Response:
The only thing I was worried about was too much fan service taking away from the story, but seeing that isn't a problem, glad you enjoyed!
[Report This]Date: June 09 2015 10:28 PM Title: An Unexpected Trip
Yeah this chapter is fine. The chapter was really good. I would like to read more about butts, boobs, etc. But there is a line somewhere though. As long as it continues to be a gentle story. Then you will have my review.
One of the things I find odd is how weak the telepath is. You think Michelle would be a strong witch to cast the spell range more than two feet. And I know your trying to write unaware parts.
But I doubt she would forget where she put him. But it did lead to a good chapter.
Author's Response:
Earlier in chapter 3 the weakness of the telepathic link was explained by Michelle only had one alchemy stone. I really made the telepathic link weak to allow for unaware situations like I'm chapter six. I figured since most of the unaware scenes were unwanted by Iaaac, he could have just warned her if it had a larger range. As always, thanks for the reviews!