Date: April 18 2015 11:25 AM Title: Chapter 1
I completely understand.
It sometimes takes me almost two-weeks to get a chapter to a length which I think is just right. This is painful, especially when I want to publish something I think is good ASAP.
Date: April 16 2015 2:41 PM Title: Chapter 1
Just as others said.
It should really be longer (more descriptive).
Thanks for the feedback, I've always found it difficult to make the story longer
Date: April 16 2015 9:50 AM Title: Chapter 1
Nice to see you wrote it. Congrats!
Thanks, any help you could provide would be greatly appreciated
Date: April 16 2015 12:11 AM Title: Chapter 1
This is a very interesting premise but the descriptions could be a bit more fleshed out. Also, I think you need to pay a bit more attention to things like capitalisation and punctuation.
Look forward to seeing more from you!