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Reviewer: The 229 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 08 2015 7:01 PM Title: Chapter 1

Thank you for re vewieing my story, yes grammer is hard for me. Can you give me some more tips for spelling and grammer, also is it to late to go back and put more spaces in my story? Since I have posted it to the site. I mean with out re posting it?

Reviewer: Mr E Signed [Report This]
Date: March 28 2015 4:40 PM Title: Chapter 1

I really liked the story but there were some formatting and grammar issues that could be worked on. makebelieve has it covered in his review.

I hope to see more work from you!

Reviewer: noneaccount Anonymous [Report This]
Date: March 28 2015 5:11 AM Title: Chapter 1

Hey, hey!

I see you've published a good bit of stories lately. Just thought I may offer some suggestions:

Spelling errors throughout tend to take the reader out of the story (i'm guilty of this myself). Make sure you edit as well as you can and catch these buggers before you publish your story.

Formatting can make or break a story, maybe even more-so than spelling. It sets the flow and pace of your story. Hell, depending on the theme of your story, your formatting can make it super-awesome or unbearable to read.

I'd reccomend spacing out your dialogue more so that readers can follow who's speaking more clearly. Proper use of punctuation can really help out with this. The difference between a "," and a ";" when reading is astounding.

Aso, Don't be afraid to chop your story up into many little paragraphs. It gives the reader (and yourself) time to rest between story portions and allows easy story development from paragraph to paragraph. Heck, they can range from 1-8 sentences long depending on how you punctuate. 

I take it that English may not be your primary language;you're still doing remarkably well. Practice makes perfect!  

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