Reviews For Carnal
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Reviewer: Maximus Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 05 2015 8:52 PM Title: Poached

That was awesome, I was worried you would give it a hollywood ending with Faye rushing in for the rescue, so glad you let Oliva go through with it, that was great!

The only thing I think that would have made it better, was Eli's point of view from the moment he entered the poacher (fantastic idea by the way, using a poacher) and then his point of view entering her mouth and being swallowed.

But I'm just nit picking, from Faye tricking him to Oliva stealing and eating him, awesome job!

Reviewer: Jimbob Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 05 2015 6:22 PM Title: Poached

Olivia sure is an inconsiderate friend. Faye spent a good amount of money on her new toy, and less than 36 hours later her so called "friend" intentionally broke it. On top of that, Faye might still have had some feelings for Eli.

Reviewer: Argos Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 04 2015 6:13 PM Title: Poached

i like it;)

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