[Report This]Date: January 28 2015 4:30 AM Title: The Tomboy and Her Revenge
That second chapter was quite good and makes me look forward to the next. I'm curious to see what you have up your sleeve and I'm sure whatever it is will be great. One of the only problems I could find with this chapter was your spelling of "Resources" but aside from that everything was delightful.
Author's Response:
I am glad that you are enjoyed the second chapter and that you have high hopes for what I come up with in the future. I didn't realize that I was messing up the word resources, i will fix that and pay more attention to how I write in the future.
[Report This]Date: January 26 2015 8:48 PM Title: Goddess Raquel
Damn, well done.
Author's Response:
Thanks!
[Report This]Date: January 26 2015 8:36 PM Title: The Tomboy and Her Revenge
I know this story doesn't have a scat tag on it but I really hope Raquel or one of her friends end up pooping on one of the planets :D
Author's Response:
Thanks for the rating. After writing the second chapter I was thinking that someone might want some scat, but I might have to do that for another story since the story doesn't have a scat tag, but if there is enough support for it, then I will consider adding scat in a future chapter along with a tag.
Date: January 19 2015 3:33 AM Title: The Tomboy and Her Revenge
A unique and excellent idea for a story, and the execution so far is pretty good. I will be cheering you on and giving you encouragement so you don't lose steam and hopefully help you reach your full potential on this one. It's such a wonderful idea. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response:
Thanks, I am glad you find my idea and execution for this story good. I will try hard to push myself to not only finish, but make this an enjoyable piece.
[Report This]Date: January 18 2015 11:06 AM Title: The Tomboy and Her Revenge
I already love the story and will continue to eagerly read updates in the future.
Author's Response:
I am a huge fan of your work, just had to put that out there before anything else I write. I am glad that you like the story so far and I will try my hardest to make this story great and I will try to update regularly to not keep the readers waiting. I hope you enjoy what I have planned for the future.
[Report This]Date: January 17 2015 4:41 PM Title: The Tomboy and Her Revenge
I love this kind of scenario, the plot is interesting with a lot of potential. Personally, I find very exciting the talk between the giantess and the little defenseless people before the physical/material interaction, as when she begins to make some damage. Thank you very much for sharing your story whith us, I can't wait to see more...
Author's Response:
I am glad that you can see the potential that this story has. If you are into a giantess belittling the tinies, then you will love what is going to happen soon, things are going to be humiliating and cruel for the tiny people soon. I hope you enjoy the story and support it till the end and I will try my best to keep make this story the best I have ever made and hopefully make it a favorite for many readers.
Date: January 17 2015 3:57 AM Title: The Tomboy and Her Revenge
I created an account just for this story. I really enjoyed the first chapter ! I'm a big fan of your work :) Keep going !
Author's Response:
it means alot to me that you created an account for my story. I am encouraged to write more and better when people like you enjoy my work. I will try to make this story a great piece of work, so I hope you will enjoy it til its end.
Date: January 16 2015 9:14 PM Title: The Tomboy and Her Revenge
I'm liking the start. Personally, I'd rather have it be more convenient than drag on forever, although that's not necessarily a bad thing if it is done well. Also, I agree that Raquel should be figuring out what the spheres are soon. Keep it up. I hope you can stick with this story to the end!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the comment and Raquel will know what the spheres are next chapter, which is when the real fun begins. I will try my hardest to keep this story going, while trying to keep a decent standard of quality. i hope you enjoy what comes next and that you stick with the story to the end.
Date: January 16 2015 1:55 PM Title: The Tomboy and Her Revenge
Hmm, slightly offended but that's not the purpose of reviews. I find the premise of this story interesting and has a lot of potential if enough work is put into it. Now onto things that will make this story better. The biggest and easiest thing is to add an extra blank line in between paragraphs and conversations. This helps us, the readers, when we are going from one line to the next. The biggest problem that I had personally is that everything is too convenient. I could see finding the guy at night far away but to find a guy walking around in daylight in a noticeable suit was weird. The last critique would be making the girl have more common sense. She believes in Elite 50, knows the guy works for them and sees 50 small spheres but doesn't know what they are. Other than that I'd say you've came up with a good story with the ability to branch of in any direction. It'll be interesting to see how someone can destroy 47 planets in 47 different ways.
Author's Response:
Sorry about offending you and I will consider fixing the spacing issue to make things easy to read. As for how convenient everything is, this is done on purpose. The chapter was becoming longer than I expected and I just wanted to get to the meat of the story instead of being more meticulous about the plot flow. I also never said she counted the spheres, she is still unaware that there are 50 of them and no one knows the planets are tiny, so I didn't think that she would even consider that the spheres are in fact planets, I doubt anyone would. But I am still glad to have a review none the less and I will try to make the story better in the future and come up with interesting ways to destroy the planets.