Reviewer: christiawi9 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 18 2015 3:22 AM Title: Bio/Chapter one

Really good story. One suggestion I'd have is to make events count and don't repeat something too often. I've seen this in other vore stories where the protagonist is eaten then regurgiated multiple times but nothing ever progresses. I really like this story and would hate to see that happen.

What would be cool is if you took the events from these chapters and fully progressed them, making them matter. For example, in the story frankie mentioned how calm Tara was about what happened. You could show how people are caring less about her as a human and more as something that can be easily eaten.

That way if you have another few chapters with vore in them you could use each chapter to build on the idea that people are seeing her less as a person. After all, how can someone be clasified as a person if they end up as a morsal so easily. Just a suggestion. 

Author's Response: Hey christiawi9 thank you for the review I appreciate the advice :). I will defiantly be adding more ideas and more development of characters as it goes on. My first few chapters were more to see if people liked my writing style and to refine it a bit before getting in to the gritty more complicated parts, my next chapter will be compleatly different ideas. Well hopefully lol - frankstergirl

Reviewer: julieshrink Signed [Report This]
Date: January 07 2015 3:13 PM Title: Bio/Chapter one

Very good, i love tales vore, I am looking forward to continued ...

Do not delay to continue.

Author's Response: Thank you for the review :) I will be trying to keep regular updates as best I can, but you can't rush perfection ;p