[Report This]Date: December 29 2014 8:15 PM Title: Change is inevitable
Yes! I hope you had a good Christmas! It's good to see you're back writing, can't wait to see the next chapters! I'm loving where this is going, and can't wait to see why Kendra was so accepting of his fate, and what he'll do about his phone. Maybe have Kevin shrink half of a charger cable or something? IDK.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much, Dante. Yes, it's been a pretty nice season for me to rest up and enjoy the holidays. Looking forward to great things in 2015 and plenty more writing. Thank you as always for supporting my writing and I hope your holiday season was equally as amazing
[Report This]Date: December 29 2014 6:57 AM Title: Change is inevitable
I find you've got something very interesting here, in you're plot; the realism of the situation (with Kelly) as she, feels so concerned for Jake, but,... at the same time, has to get on with her own life and has such mixed feelings- blaming herself for his plight, and distracted by Kevin coming back into her life. - .... as most 'normal' people would, she herself, has no real love for him,-(as a tiny four inch tall man) she, wants to protect him, and loves him as a 'friend', but, unfortunately,... nothing more...
...which, really makes me fall for her even more! Ha!
Oh, well,... such is life!
I hate to see Kelly give him up, but this Kendra now,... she seems to be fascinated by this turn of events...
'Kendra'- I like the name. I picture the model that used to work at the 'Playboy mansion',... I think you know the one?
This could get a whole lot more interesting now, I can't wait to see Kendras initail reaction to her tiny 'exe'; and, why she seems to be so determinined to see him again,... especially, knowing that he's just four inches tall?
...the thought of 'her' as a giantess? Wow! ;`)
[Report This]Date: December 29 2014 2:33 AM Title: Change is inevitable
Really good story. Only thing i can think of would be more interaction with Jake and Kelly or soon to be Kendra. In a couple of the chapters Kelly would just shut Jake away.
There was no interacting. Like next chapter or the next next chapter. Have Kelly and Jake do something fun together.
Date: December 28 2014 10:21 PM Title: Change is inevitable
I am realy enjoing this story, awesome work!