Reviewer: aronse265 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 23 2014 2:44 PM Title: Hunger and Lust

Great Story!!! Please write the next chapter!!! I know you are having trouble with your girlfriend dumping and all, and I knew you just wanted reviews so here is mine...

The story is doing great so far the structure is great, the vocabulary you use is great everything about it is great. It's good that you are not using the same words to describe a person speaking all the time (he,she,said). There is one thing in the story that you could improve on and that is the character development, the readers don't know much about any of the characters all you have given us is just a description of what they look like, but apart from that everything is good.

Great story please upload the next chapter soon. ;)

Author's Response:

Thanks, I'm uploading it right now!

Reviewer: gtsfan91 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 22 2014 3:53 AM Title: Hunger and Lust

Ahh! Please dont stop writing. The last chapter was amazing!! Loved the sex parts especially everytime around "... gave Tommy a boner", I can picture the beauty Tommy has before his eyes to happen and also can understand his hormones driving him from there. Really liked the part between him and Cat. Youre an amazing author and already one of ma favorite on here. Hope youll feel better soon again.

Reviewer: zol Signed [Report This]
Date: December 21 2014 10:18 AM Title: Hunger and Lust

You dont need to thank me :) And youre very welcome! Im glad I was able to cheer you up a little bit :) I think it would be even better this way, so Tommy was checking every cup, putting the "clean" ones next to each other so he would know which one he alread checked. after a few his friends would suggest that Tommy would try one himself, because he didnt look that good (the white face), and Tommy would just say like maybe youre right, I could need one right now, and he takes one from the ones he checked already, so they would be al safe "of course", but unfortunatly he would take the one where Bobby was swimming in, and he gulps it down (of course longer detailed pov switch here). Cat would enter and Tommy would angrily confront her, that she lied about where Bobby and Francine were, because he checked all the cups and they weren in any of them. he already had accepted the idea that it must be a lie, because Jenny didnt see anything unnusual in her cup, and he himself had checked all of the other cups, so of course logic would say, that they werent in any of them in the first place, right (; Cat would also put some salt into the idea making it even more inclear by saying maybe I made it all up or something, and Tommy even could jump on that, like see, I knew you made it up, which would it even make much more humiliating for Bobby and Francine. Again, I hope youre not upset anymore, please try to have some unstressful times!!

Author's Response:

Thanks for more suggestions, but what I was thinking of (and what I've started to write a little bit of) was much closer to your first idea. I can promise there will be more vore and a confrontation between Cat and Tommy in the final chapter, tho!

Reviewer: zol Signed [Report This]
Date: December 21 2014 8:28 AM Title: Hunger and Lust

Hiii!! First at all, I am sorry, I havent reviewed the chapter before this one, but please dont take it personal or anything. It's just I didnt really like it, and I didnt want to give a bad review and making you upset or anything, and I also didnt want to lie :( It's just I dont like macro shrinking, anything larger than 1/4" I dont really enjoy reaing, and sizes around 1 or even 2 inches I never read, because it's just unrealistic for me, especially when vore is combined. Also the chapter didnt seem to be right to me somehow, the places jumped too chaotic somehow and it didnt read right. But I want to review this one now, because you totally made up for it again and also wrote in a good/normal style like your other chapters. I just loved the idea of Tommy having sex with Cat too, really great idea. I wished for things had gone different here and there, it's a little bit sad that you have the whole story already planed and you cant take wishes or idea from reviews, though you said before youd love hearing ideas from people to include. But that doesnt mean that the chapter and story so far isnt great :) Really liked the eggnog cup plan, wished though it would had been gone a little bit different, personally I would had delayed it a little bit more Tommy coming into action, and him having some more private time with Cat. Loved the fact of how Tommys id driven so much by his hormones and it's like a switch which turns into sex mode from being interested what might happen to his friends. I really hope youll still write the final chapter, and I am deeply sorry for that you didnt get reviews for the last chapter, please dont take it personal. Maybe people had lots of troubles too because it was final exam week, and all the Christmas stress and everything!! Also I am sorry to hear about your gf, that really sucks man, especially around Christmas. Actually my Christmas wont be nice too, maybe even my saddest Christmas so far, and honestly, all whats left is me hoping for some nice stories I like to get updated, which always let me forget all my problems and have some nice reading times, and your work is included in that list!! Dont be sad, please!! :) If you still will write the final chapter, and hell I hope so :), maybe you could include something like everything goes wrong and Tommy wont be able to save his friends in some ironic way. For example Tommy could come dropping into the room and be like noo, but in that very moment Jenny would just lower the cup again and Tommy would stare down into it, empty, and his friends would be like ...what?, making a weird face expression, and Tommy would just get a white face and be like uhm (not finding words) di- did you notice something strange in your eggnog, and Simon stepping forward be like what the hell does that now mean, where have you even been? Tommy just starring there and looking down to the table and be like uhm it's not that important I-, Jenny laughing and be like here you should try one too coming to your sensen, and Tommy just shouting NO- lowering his tone again, and his friends be like dude... whats the matter, relax, and he just  be like uhm I, (coming up with a lie because he didnt want to tell them), and he looks down towards the other cups and begins to sort them one by one in the hope to find his friends, so he begins to lift every cup, looks into it a seconds, and puts it back on the table, on his left, to sort them all and make sure. his friends just stand behind him and talk like to each other what the hell is he doing there, and Simon would just be like whatever, Tommy is sometimes strange, laughing and reaching for a cup, and Tommy just be like noo, take one of these alright? pointing to the ones he had already checked, and Simon just making a weird face and be like uhm... ok? and taking one from them. during that checking the one cup where Bobby was in would had been lifted up by Tommy and Bobby would had been like im saved!! tommy!! down here!!, but a horrible bad luck event would happen, because of the gravity of lifting up the cup, Bobby would get sucked under the thick eggnop liquid and while Tommy would look inside the cup, he wouldnt see anything special, and put the "ok" cup next to the others, in the believe his friends were still in one of the others and he could save them. then Simon would lift the one where Bobby would be in, and send him on a one way trip through his digestive tract. after Tommy had checked them all he would become really sick because he didnt find them, and Cat would enter the room and Tommy would be like you lier! and cat just laughing be like oops, maybe I made it all up!? who knows? Sorry for all the text and things, and I guess you had already written the last chapter and cant include that part. but if so and it would still be possible, that would be great :) I hope my review made you feel a little bit happier after the things happened to you, and I promise, I will always try to review!! please dont get upset if people dont review for just one chapter!! they all have lifes and things and sometimes it's just bad timing!! you had so mayne nice and good reviews for your work before, please dont forget that!! so people love your work :) !! I hope you will still have some nice holidays, and I also wish you a nice lasting Sunday :) Cheers!!

Author's Response:

Thank you very much for your response! I hope you still have a good Christmas, all this feedback is making me feel better to! I really like your suggestions, and I will do my best to incroporate them into the final chapter. Thanks for writing a bunch and I'll try to have the new chapter out in a day or two, Christmas Eve at the latest.