Date: November 23 2014 3:47 PM Title: Chapter 5: The Start Of The First Trial
I think Jessica behaved well this chapter...Letting him fend for himself when it looks like he has a chance but getting involved when Tucker is put in an impossible to avoid scenario.
I also understand where she was coming from this chapter...Tucker could have been less insensitive when he told her to let him fight his battles. But like I said last chapter, she can't just put him in a suit of bubble wrap and protect him from the world all the time! (Well, technically, she could just overpower him and do it, but eh...)
Anyway great chapter! I hope Tucker and Jess will have less disputes from now on.
Thanks for the feedback and maybe they will have less disputes but they will still push each other like many friends do. Hopefully they'll both grow from this (Not in the literal sense of course, well maybe Jessica) and move on.
Date: November 23 2014 7:44 AM Title: Chapter 5: The Start Of The First Trial
I did like the way Jessica and Tucker interacted. Very interesting and stimulating. The way the armor came together was certainly easy to visualize.
One criticism is actually a bit of a nitpick. When Tucker and the Armor were dueling, you did not mention how hard it would be for Tucker to block a strike. If the armor is over six feet tall, probably would feel like a battering ram with every blow. Even in the most experienced hands it would be painful.
Other than that, I am very much looking forward to the next chapter. Nicely done.
Thanks for the feedback and I'll have to remember that for later on since it won't be Tucker's only swordfight. He did dodge many of the blows but along the way he might get a little stronger with the sword.