Reviewer: Nest99 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 27 2024 3:40 AM Title: Chapter 36

Good shit, thank you

Reviewer: Faceless man Signed [Report This]
Date: February 20 2022 8:49 PM Title: Chapter 36

Good story.

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Appreciate it!

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: July 28 2015 12:18 AM Title: Chapter 36

What a very beautiful story. About everything. Alan did a fine job with Naomi, Paul and Rachel. Those people really got what they deserved. 10/10

 

Author's Response: Thanks, Barrowman! Glad you enjoyed it.

Reviewer: el_rooto Signed [Report This]
Date: February 03 2014 4:56 PM Title: Chapter 36

Wow, this story s just... you probably already know it from all the coments, right?

Imho this and Jacksmith's Julia are the best long stories on the whole website bar nonw.

 

That being said, I "read" it years ago, when I thought that "giantess" and "long story with an actual plot" just didn't fit together, which is why I'm only commenting at the end -- there were many great moments, but having already skipped through the story for dirty parts meant I already knew what was going to happen, so I felt stupid leaving comments when I already knew what was going to happen in the next chapter.

 

I don't think it's seriously possible to tell you just HOW good it is in a single comment (even if someone tried!), but to prove that I actually did read it this time (and I liked it enough to note these down), here's a few typos:

 

"Til one is the tallest and one is the smallest of all" (isn't it "Till"?)

"Naomi is all smiles. She tells Naomi"

"I  hear the flick and click of a cigarette lighter, and a long, contented sigh from Naomi" (it's Cheryl)

"Rachel promised to help me smooth things over with Rachel"

 

Hope you can get back to writing some day!

 

Reviewer: The GTS Reviewer Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 29 2011 5:28 PM Title: Chapter 36

Hello, Cayce.  I am aware that you’ve taken a very long leave of absence from this site, which is unfortunate for myself and many of your other fans, because you are truly in tune with the giantess fantasy: you understand nearly as well as possible, I believe, how to take the enticing spirit of the fetish and elevate it to something more.

 

COMPLIMENTS: What can I say?  There’s a lot to comment on.  Your narrative itself is perhaps what makes this the strongest and, in my humble opinion, the greatest story on the site.  You focused entirely on creating a 100% believable story before integrating admittedly arousing elements of the actual fetish, and yet it all fits together like the perfect literary PBJ.  Few pieces of dangling illogic show up, and honestly, a connection to the plot itself is made far easier because of this.  I felt myself being inserted fully into the story, living out the events from the perspective of your hapless character, because the story flowed so naturally, once the hump of unreality is crossed; indeed, you made it a hump easily crossed.

 

Your characters are stunningly well-realized.  You managed to craft half a dozen, if not more, fully-developed giantess characters, each with a unique personality and interactions with the main character.  Perhaps best of all, though, was how they ran the gamut of genre types, six of which stand out most clearly to me: you had a calculating, conniving woman as the primary antagonist.  You had a disgusting and subtly clever best friend of the mother who knew how to be a complete psychopath, and yet stay cool the whole time.  You had an entirely becoming and likeable love interest, whom I actually sympathized with the main character’s attraction toward.  You had a mischievous stepsister, and you managed to make the interactions somewhat sexy without making it become creepy between them.  You had a best “friend” for the stepsister, who was an excellent younger reflection of her mother.  Finally, you had a humiliating step-mother character (the best of the story, in my opinion) who managed to be a terrifying, dominating source of power without having her resort to abject, destructive cruelty.

 

The variety of scenarios is excellent.  As you’ll see in the below section, one particular aspect of this felt slightly out of place for me, but for the most part, I was surprised by the glorious amount of varying situational breakdowns of your protagonist’s psych and emotional fortitude.  Just when it seems like it’s not going to get worse, it does, and because, as I mentioned, the human element is so thoroughly adhesive to the reader, you get to feel each unique mini-adventure along with the character, and that’s fantastic.  A favorite moment is nearly impossible to pick, but one in particular stands out to me: the Oreo crushing scene with Kimmy as Ray slowly starves in her captivity.  Sheer, maniacal brilliance for both characters.  It’s a scene I plan on rereading from time to time.

 

THE CRITIQUES: There aren’t many to give on my part for this category, but here we go anyway.  Honestly, my biggest complaint I can possibly level is that the story is so foot-focused, and it’s so long, that I almost wished I could have seen other genres pop up more frequently.  You certainly fit in several others in a few occasions, but for the most part, it’s a gigantic footfest, no pun intended.  Granted, you keep the tension and enjoyment factor up commendably well in these segments, but still, a tiny bit more variety would have been greatly appreciated, especially having seen how well you write “foot” scenes; I would have liked to see some more showcasing for a few of the related genres that could have fit in with the tale just fine and left room for the feet spotlights.

 

One other tiny suggestion I might make is to be aware of your character’s relative “catchphrases” throughout the progressing storyline, as he tends to repeat similar phrasings on more than one occasion.  I know this is bound to happen in such a lengthy story, and many probably won’t even notice it, but it was a tiny reminder to me of the character’s fictional nature.  Again, this is but a tiny blemish on an otherwise phenomenal story.

 

Author's Response: Thanks for the extensive review (and the utterly reasonable critiques =) I know I've been incommunicado for a while, but I'm still around! I've been lurking quite a bit, and working (intermittently) on a new story. Homunculus was the first thing I wrote for this group, and while I remain quite proud of it (especially the ending), there are a few things I would do differently if I were writing it today. But such is the peril of publishing a chapter at a time! My favorite stories on these boards have always been the ones with relatable, realistic characters. When I first started this story, I was basically aping the authors whose stories I most enjoyed (Nemo, Jamie, Branford, DX Machina, and Canuck, to name a few). Nemo in particular has a talent for taking a cliched giantess scenario, deconstructing the crap out of it, and turning it into something totally unique. I'm quite fond of the Oreo scene as well, as well as the first bath scene with Cheryl (which was admittedly inspired by Branford's Bad Day for Shopping). I like most of Ray's interactions with his stepsister Nicole, but there's one that felt wrong and a little out of place when I wrote it, and I've never warmed up to it. I wrote it in reaction to a debate that was raging at the time on the now defunct Giantess Magic message board, where some rather strident members of the community were insisting that merely acknowledging the existence of children in a story was the same thing as child pornography. But going back and rereading the scene, it now seems hamfisted and ill-advised. As you said the repetitiveness is a symptom of a lengthy story, especially one that is published a chapter at a time. I often come up with a particular turn of phrase that I like, and I forget to check and see if I've already used it or not. If I showed this stuff to my editor, I'm sure she would catch those mistakes and slice them out post haste. But when you're editing your own work and publishing piecemeal over the course of a couple of years, that kind of thing tends to slip under the radar. It's a fair cop on the "gigantic footfest" (heh!), and I'll readily admit that those scenes are what really drove me to write this story. Again, my editor would probably cut most of that stuff out as superfluous (and would likely advise me to "quit writing about goddamn feet and go get laid or something"--she talks like a sailor, that one). But as any writer will tell you, killing your own darlings is a difficult thing to do. Thanks again for reading the story and for the great review!