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Reviewer: Jacksmith Signed [Report This]
Date: September 29 2014 5:02 PM Title: Chapter 19: My own foot toy
Date: September 29 2014 5:02 PM Title: Chapter 19: My own foot toy
I do agree with the previous reviewer to an extent, there are some grammar/spelling things that could use cleaning up, and occasionally the dialogue can sound stilted. Overall though it's not bad. You keep things moving at a decent pace and use a good range of tags to appeal to more readers. Maybe try giving things another editing pass to help smooth over inconsistencies.
Reviewer: julieshrink Signed [Report This]
Date: September 20 2014 4:29 AM Title: Chapter 19: My own foot toy
Author's Response: Thanks I'm glad to hear that my stories are enjoyed a lot, so much that they are given 5*
Date: September 20 2014 4:29 AM Title: Chapter 19: My own foot toy
Excelente!
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Author's Response: Thanks I'm glad to hear that my stories are enjoyed a lot, so much that they are given 5*