[Report This]Date: April 19 2015 8:16 PM Title: Chapter 45
Alright, I'll admit that I wasn't expecting to enjoy this chapter as much, what with the winner possibly including a giant-Dale in the mix for the obligatory sex-capade...But I have to say, the way you handled every character and the consequences of their respective actions in this last bit really made it an enjoyable read and a good way to wrap up the show :)
Seriously, the results of Dale's immunity was by far the best surprise in this chapter. Bravo sir. xD
(On a side note, incase you're unaware and wanted a heads up, you have a little typo near the end of Betty's scene, where I think you meant to write 'Tom' instead of 'Jerry' )
Author's Response:
Thank you sir! I thought that was a fitting way to end the competition for Dale as well. And yes, sadly the story has many typos I never got to fixing.
[Report This]Date: April 16 2015 1:27 AM Title: Chapter 45
Man, were u drunk or something? So many spelling errors and u keep mixing up the names this chapter. Lol.
I knew it! Vera wouldn't abuse the other contestants! However I wished she used Andy.
Is Vera a virgin? I never thought she was but she sure sounded like one in this chapter.
I like the random Dale paragraph at the end. It's like you knew that I was gonna ask "Hey, what about Dale?"
I like how Sherri like dumped Tom for Jerry. Betty is like "more toys for me!" Vera gives the contestants to her, and Sherri leaves Tom with Betty.
Very good ending. Almost happily ever after type. I kept smiling and my heart felt warm when Paul and Vera got united.
Carla vs Andy 2.0 next chapter (I hope).
I can't wait chapter 46!
Author's Response:
Lol, it is entirely possible I was drunk, I don't remember, I wrote that chapter nearly seven years ago now! I also didn't spell check it back then--my modern works are much more clean when it comes to mechanics like that.
Vera isn't a virgin, but she is a "giantess"-virgin, and also is concious of hurting Paul, so that's where her awkwardness comes from.
And yes I had to mention Dale because otherwise people would wonder about him.
Only one more chapter!