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Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 23 2014 9:28 PM Title: Chapter 22

First of all, I checked out that Tigerwomen story and you blew my mind! It was well thought out and it sparked a few ideas in my head. You also provided enough details so I cant wonder how certain things happened becuase you already answered them. That introduction was fantastic.

I think Tigerwomen is the better title name. Its more unique compared to Ownership.

There are a lot of names you can chose to replace Hu with. I usually start with celebrity names. Im sure you will find one that is suitbale for the story.

As for this chapter of the shrinking show, I expected Paul to show a little more worry. You mentioned that he was "confused, worried, and terrifired" at certain points, but i just didnt feel it.

It felt like Paul handled it well, and he wasnt as afriad of Betty's enourmous features as I thought he would be. He seems more like a tough man now. Im not sure if this was inteneded, or if I just read it differently.

Wow! Tom was inside Betty the whole time! He is probably immune to suffocating now, haha.

When Betty said to Tom "I will leave you here for Sherri", that sounds like a hot topic. One giantess leaving a tiny inside a trap just waiting for another giantess to show up and use them. Now thats hot.

I wonder how the contestants are doing....I cant wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked the Tiger Women introductory chapter! I hope you check back with my blog because I've been posting again--though I might also post on DeviantArt because I dowbt many people are going to happen upon my WordPress.

I'm glad you liked the new chapter! Paul certainly handled himself with Betty a lot better than other people did--and will, if you catch my drift.

Reviewer: Jimbob Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 22 2014 9:05 PM Title: Chapter 22

Paul managed to impress me this chapter. For all his arrogance and pride, he managed to push aside his fears and do what he was told. Not once did he complain, beg, or protest.

That being said, Betty was pretty spot on with her prediction of him being first out. Some of the contestants may not be able to see his true self, but from the perspective of the viewer (and reader) he's an arrogant jerk with an inflated ego. So much pride over his military career, and it ends up being Navy and never served in combat. It's okay to be proud of military service, but Paul was taking it to douchebag levels.



Author's Response:

Very astute charicterization of Paul!

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