[Report This]Date: July 15 2014 10:42 AM Title: Chapter 6
Jerry is definitely playing it right here. He hasn't offended anybody, and everybody feels safe with him. That suggests that he's about to get bigger, and Paul and Vera are about to get smaller.
It's good that you spent so much time describing the characters in action. You get to know people by seeing them talk and act, not by reading a list of one-word traits.
Author's Response:
Jerry is definitely a low-key, non-offensive kind of guy. The tough guys are the ones that get themselves into trouble, as we see. And I'm glad you like my approach with the characters. I definitely do like to think of them as if they were actual people rather than just a list of a few traits. I also tried to make it so that people could see any character in a positive or negative light depending on their viewpoint, although I am sure fan favorites are going to emerge.
[Report This]Date: July 15 2014 1:15 AM Title: Chapter 6
My favorite chapter so far, and this was a long one!
Sneaky little Jerry making alliances with everyone. No one even hates him and he hasnt been doing much in this story. Im proud that he was a big factor this time.
Mighty Dale trying to move 1 step forward but took 2 steps back. Im not even sure if he will ever grow again.
Paul is living the life. Dominant, in control. Watching everyone shrink around him. He is friends with Marie and Vera, but i think he will shrink soon.
Vera seems to have nothing left. No physical power, no freinds except Paul and maybe Jerry. Well, i guess everyone is a friend of Jerry. She needs to be a team player and show some positive reinforcement to her teamates like Marie who is always joyful.
Speaking of Marie, that little girl is gonna get herself knocked off the show at this rate. She will keep shrinking and once she is at that last size, it will be too late.
Hailey may have lost Dale, but she quickly found Jerry. Not that hard to find someone when you are the only fullsized female.
Carla is the girl that I fancy personally and I want her to grow and dominate this competition. Im glad she made that alliance with Andy, and Marie. She even got Paul rooting for her a little bit. Now that she is used to her size, I see no trouble for her to rise back to the top.
Lastly, Andy my man. You did it. You got Carla to like you and grant you your wish if it happens. I am feeling exactly like Andy; I want him to be smaller than Carla and for Carla to dominate him. She even wanted Andy to sleep with him. Congrats, I hope Andy's wish does come true.
Benton, Im glad you started off setting the scene and developing character. It makes these later scenes much better and much more enjoyable. This chapter had some great action and I was glad that I know all the characters by now.
I cant wait for the next chapter! I think it is going to be epic!
Author's Response:
I like your analysis of the character's positions at this point. The main idea for these early chapters is the characters (and audience) getting to know one another, and the beginning of their scheming and planning before the real excitement begins. It is always fun to throw challenges and situations at these characters and see how they react!