Date: July 28 2014 5:18 PM Title: Report 8: Closing Thoughts and Relevant Notes
I avoided reading comments until midstory after I noticed that someone was commenting on the surprising finale (in the first chapter!), so no problem... except that, err, this Julia Mack, and that Jack A., they remind me of something (mostly words like "Goddess" and "worship").
Many of us congratulated you about this story - I've postponed reading Dilbertaco's comeback to read it. 'Nuff said
Author's Response:
I appreciate your comments on this one. I'd have to agree that those are fairly relevant words to use for Julia and Jack. Thanks for reading!
Date: July 10 2014 8:23 PM Title: Report 8: Closing Thoughts and Relevant Notes
Reread this and the line of " A lot of her to cover up" intrigues me. What, did Techilogic grow someone and they're hiding her in the valley because its too dangerous to shrink her down?
Author's Response:
We'll just have to wait and see won't we? ;)
[Report This]Date: July 10 2014 5:42 PM Title: Report 8: Closing Thoughts and Relevant Notes
Great read, I take it Avalon is where Carly and/or Julia was residing.
Also I wonder how much of other stories like The Freshman or Family Reunion tie into this whole mess even if it's a small bit. Excellent crafting of your own Smithverse.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading/reviewing! Family Reunion probably could take place in this world, albeit prior to Blackmail, since no one in that story had heard of people being able to shrink. Freshman I would be more inclined to say exists on its own, since Peter is acknowledged as a complete anomaly, but who knows?
[Report This]Date: July 10 2014 7:44 AM Title: Report 8: Closing Thoughts and Relevant Notes
You did a great job, Jack! Not only at telling a non-raunchy story. But, at showing that changing a corrupt system from within is always easier said than done. Because how can you do that when those who make the same rules they demand you play by, consistently break them? And, not only with impunity, but with complete anonymity?
Answer: you can't.
Which is why most civil rights' martyrs had to act like outlaws before those powerful enough to make laws started changing them...from bad to good.
Author's Response:
Thanks for this and all your reviews on this story. That conflict of morals and systematic rules was really what I hoped to illustrate here.
[Report This]Date: July 10 2014 7:41 AM Title: Report 8: Closing Thoughts and Relevant Notes
I wonder if the people that took june work here.
Author's Response:
;)
[Report This]Date: July 10 2014 6:23 AM Title: Report 8: Closing Thoughts and Relevant Notes
This is not the ending I predicted, but it's still good. It makes for a fine sequel hook, with Howard still able to work. This story in general has been good for worldbuilding, by providing hints of things that can be blown up into their own stories, and there are many opportunities to explore moral and social issues.
Author's Response:
I've appreciated your commentary on this one, man. Glad you think it was effective at worldbuilding.