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Reviewer: Jimbob Signed [Report This]
Date: March 17 2015 9:18 AM Title: Chapter 28 - The Big Slow Down

This latest chapter really needs some formatting. You've got all the dialogue scrunched up together and it makes it hard to tell who's saying what.



Author's Response:

Wow. That didn't post like that when I did it. All my line breaks are gone. I'll fix that....

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