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Reviewer: Bug Lover Signed [Report This]
Date: May 17 2016 9:04 AM Title: Chapter 1: Magical Snails

Damn poor snail almost got crushed by a male, snails don't deserve that.

Reviewer: lilguyunderfoot Signed [Report This]
Date: June 19 2014 6:51 AM Title: Chapter 1: Magical Snails

this is a fun one

Reviewer: TheSilentOne Signed [Report This]
Date: June 09 2014 7:38 AM Title: Chapter 1: Magical Snails

The chapter numbering I think causes some needless confusion. I would just renumber them in order, and rename that chapter to what it's about.  The explanation at the beginning is enough to know you had some more stuff written, but it didn't flow well and so you didn't post it, we don't really need the chapter outline to do that.



Author's Response:

Yeah, good points about the names and such. I will go back and fix that. Thing is, I added stuff to this kinda randomly, so my chapters numbers are way off.

And i didn't take things out because they didn't flow right. I just never wrote them. Thought it would be a funny way to move the story along.

Reviewer: Lupe Signed [Report This]
Date: June 08 2014 1:16 PM Title: Chapter 1: Magical Snails

Just saw this story. Interesting ideas! Wonder if he's really taking the whole tour through her body haha

Author's Response:

Thanks for the comment, and yes he will get to see everything! At least the fun stuff.

Reviewer: Chloe13 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 03 2014 7:37 PM Title: Chapter 1: Magical Snails

I have read quite a few tranformation stories and most normally lack the detail to make the scenario interesting. Your story is a little weirder since it is an animal tranformation which again is something you don't see much of.

 

I must say though that your story idea is well executed details are good the story is good and the things happening to our little fly are so well described that I will admit it has managed to exite me.

 

It is good different but good

 

-Chloe



Author's Response:

Chloe, thank you for the praise! Whenever I wright something, I try to make it as interesting as possible. I’m glad others are able to enjoy it.

Reviewer: Mr E Signed [Report This]
Date: June 02 2014 7:42 PM Title: Chapter 1: Magical Snails

I was going to say add anything butt related but then I saw your response to lost soul.

so I guess i'll change my answer to...... idk anything to do with female giantesses. hopefully one of the girls, if not many girls gets to eat him and he does a full tour of their body, partially immune to their stomach acids. I like the idea of a happy ending but he's going to have to go through a lot to achieve that.



Author's Response:

I got'cha. I think what i'm going to do is add some more animal interactions (I do like animals) then go back to more normal giantess stuff, like butt and vore. And i already wrote a chapter with full tour in it, so its only a matter of time until that pops up.

Reviewer: Noodlefanboy25 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 31 2014 5:52 PM Title: Chapter 1: Magical Snails

Great story

Author's Response:

Thanks Noodle!

Reviewer: LostSoul Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 17 2014 6:27 PM Title: Chapter 1: Magical Snails

I really liked the changing room seen, a bit more description would be even better. I feel this would be a whole lot better if you stuck to interactions with giant women instead of birds, but it's your story, so it's your choice. Boobs/butt and maybe giant articles of clothing are my favorite. :) Good story concept nonetheless.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the comment! I know what your saying, but boobs/butt things have been done so much befor. I want to try something new. Don't worry though, it is only going to be for a chapter or two, then we switch back to humans!

Reviewer: Mr E Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 14 2014 2:51 PM Title: Chapter 1: Magical Snails

Great idea having him be immortal so there can be many deaths without introducing different characters and having to write little background stories for them. The possibilities are endless and I'm looking forward to many different deaths and body parts to be trapped in.

I dont know about this macle character. he made him immortal but I still think hes up to no good.



Author's Response:

Thanks Mr E! It realy does get anoying trying to write backstories. I realy hate them. Just get to the action! And interesting observation about Macle. I wonder if thats true or not. *snicker*

Reviewer: LostSoul Signed [Report This]
Date: May 08 2014 5:47 PM Title: Chapter 1: Magical Snails

This might be an interesting story depending on how it goes. I'll give a rating when I see more, but I might like it depending on how descriptive you are with the main character in his environment especially with his now giant sister, mother, and whatever else characters you put in you. Look forward to seeing more.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review. The next chapter will start some in-depth giantess interactions, just wait!

Reviewer: TheSilentOne Signed [Report This]
Date: May 08 2014 1:48 PM Title: Chapter 1: Magical Snails

Looks like this may be an interesting story.  I do have an opinion on the rating though.  At minimum, I'd say this was PG, even at chapter 2, but judging from the summary, I'd expect this to reach an R before it's finished.  Very few stories are legitimately G on a site like this.



Author's Response:

Yeah, so far it is PG. I already have a good chunk of this story done, just have to proof read a bit, and it does get more graphic.

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