[Report This]Date: April 16 2014 9:31 PM Title: Orientation
Feels like a really solid start on this. I just read it all, up to this, and the set-up is very well described, Sarah's already becoming common place, (excellent development) and the scentific research sounds very realistic, too.
Great start! I'll be keeping up with this one.
Author's Response:
Thanks, Midnight! I'm glad to hear that you're enjoying the story so far and even more glad to hear you'll be keeping up with it. I hope I don't disappoint!
Thanks for the great review!
[Report This]Date: April 16 2014 7:28 AM Title: Orientation
Looks like Sarah's found a buddy in Tyler. Let's see what kind of a relationship they have once things get going.
Hope you enjoy! I know the pick up to kink is a little slow thus far, but once its starts I'm hoping you'll all enjoy. ^^ I prefer good literature, so take all the time you need to develop the plot and characters. I used to go straight to the smut, but now I prefer sex scenes that come naturally out of a solid story.
Being as she was a tad shy at times. "Being as" doesn't add anything to the sentence, so there's not much point. I just got some books on writing, and they're making me think about these things.
Author's Response:
Indeed!
I'm glad to hear that, my friend! I've been concerned people might be uninterested by the plot or development and just simply want the smut. So its nice to see that someone out there appreciates the development in the story as well.
HMM! Very fair, I'll try to keep that in mind. Thanks for the tip! Books on writing, eh? That sounds pretty interesting. I can't say I've ever even taking a class on writing. Though I was thinking of doing some college studies on it soon.
As always, thanks for a most excellent review!