Reviewer: el_rooto Signed [Report This]
Date: March 30 2014 3:02 PM Title: Chapter 4: Improvisation

For some reason I thought you had changed your mind and decided to make this a long story. "joules of pressure" will make physicists cry ;P

Seriously tough, my only criticism is how short it is - it seems a bit weird to waste such a good idea to write some five chapters, especially because... I can't exactly explain why, but imho there's something in the way it's written that really makes it look like it's going to be long.

Whatever - crappy review, good story :)

Author's Response:

Honestly, I probably could've made this longer, but didn't want the story to overstay its welcome, given how odd the concept is. I may bring it back down the road though, since I've enjoyed writing it. I'm curious what's made the story feel like it'll be longer.

On the joules thing, in my defense: 1) I was writing late at night and it sounded correct at the time, and 2) My high school physics teacher disliked me, and maybe in some roundabout way this is my revenge. Yeah, we'll go with that.

Reviewer: youre_my_slave Signed [Report This]
Date: March 30 2014 8:18 AM Title: Chapter 4: Improvisation

NOOOOO! I don't want it to be over!

You're such a tease. I demand that she be desecrated by having a sharp metal object shoved in her vagina! Or maybe where the sun don't shine, if you catch my drift...

Author's Response:

Hey now, I've gotta save some tricks for any follow-up stories I do for this!  Thanks for reading/reviewing.