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Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: March 08 2014 7:58 PM Title: Chapter 1

Also I don't know why you mentioned that Kate is "a sweet girl" in the first chapter...Someone who's been holding off going on a killing spree, simply because they didn't want to get their feet dirty is NOT "a sweet girl", just saying.

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: March 08 2014 3:45 PM Title: Chapter 1

Im kind of liking this but its just giant walls of text! You need to break these up into managable paragraphs.



Author's Response:

I took your advice and split the 3rd chapter in paragraphs :D also I explained what happened to her "sweetness" but thanks for the feedback :D Keep on rolling!

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