Reviewer: SmallLeo Signed [Report This]
Date: September 15 2015 4:16 AM Title: Sisters - Part 6

Wwwhhhyyyyyyyyyyyy it hurts 😥
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Reviewer: edgehead123 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 30 2014 5:14 AM Title: Sisters - Part 6

Awesome story, I really hope you continue

Reviewer: SpookyTaco Signed [Report This]
Date: August 25 2014 8:33 AM Title: Sisters - Part 6

Amazing story. Pretty close to tears at the end there, even though I could see where things were going. Oddly, I think Claire's description of her immortality saddened me even more than Stephanie's anguish. Claire is extremely wise for her age. She'll likely just get wiser as the centuries pass making any stories in the far future extremely challenging, i.e., it would be difficult for the reader to relate at all to such omniscience.

Even now, the revelation of immortality makes past chapters difficult to swallow. I really enjoyed the growing relationship between Melody and Corey. But now, it just saddens me. I wonder what Melody's thinking. Obviously their size difference would be a huge obstacle to any inkling of a romantic relationship. However the immortality would be even greater. Imagine them both at 80 years old and she still looks in her 20's. She wouldn't be able to remain faithful for that long. And if she did, would it be out of pity, or knowing she'd just move onto another relationshiop after his death? Probably none of the above, I like Melody too much to believe that, but it's just distrubing. If they did marry, she'd likely love Corey faithfully and be deeply depressed upon his passing, but it just feels wrong. I feel like the Omegas are hiding something. Well I feel that Kayla is hiding something, that she is playing god and granting power/immortality as she see's fit. Surely with all her power she could extend a Beta's life. I don't know, I just feel like there's a deep imbalance here, a fertile ground for tragedy, and Kayla's to blame.

Hope that didn't sound like criticism because I love your work, just wanted to share what I was thinking.

Author's Response:

Hi Spooky, glad to have you back in here :)

Claire is definitely wise for her age, likely as a combination of her raising under Abby. That's an interesting note about her relateability as she continues to age and gather experience and knowledge. I'd like to think that, though she might become rather cold eventually, she'd still retain her overall kindness.

Yup. There's a reason Melody was keen to jumpstart things with Corey after his injuries, and this is pretty much why. "Probably none of the above" is also probably correct :).

Your thoughts on Kayla are interesting, though I do want to add some info that's non-spoilery. Lifespans are a good deal longer in the time this take place in, averaging somewhere between 150-180 years old. Aging in general has also become a much more graceful process. All of that thanks to Omega technology in medicine and health. It's just that even a doubled lifespan compared to present-day is just another drop in the bucket of an Omega's life. And in regards to that, some things about the Omegas may be due more to their innate biology than anything Kayla personally doles out.

Thanks for the review, Spooky. And again, good to see you back in here.

Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 25 2014 5:43 AM Title: Sisters - Part 6

This chapter got kind of hard to read at the end and I mean that in a good way. It was very emotional and damn I felt extremely sorry for Stephanie at the end.

Author's Response:

Where my stars at, Kaz! Where my stars?!

 

Seriously though, thanks for reading and for the feedback. It's always appreciated.

Reviewer: sketch Signed [Report This]
Date: August 25 2014 12:06 AM Title: Sisters - Part 6

A very moving chapter.  I could feel Stephanie's pain the whole build up. 

 

And I'm interested to know how Naomi's doing even though we might not find out for a long while.  The two of them are what has made this story interesting.  Over the long time between updates I've completely forgotten about the other girl.

Author's Response:

Thank you.

And I'm glad to see you back, sketch! As Kazuma and some others can likely attest to, I've been going all "man, where's sketch been? :(" for several updates in a row. Glad to see you're still reading, and it's great to seea review from you again.

Sadly it probably will be a while before we see Naomi again thanks to my schedule. The current plan is to handle this upcoming party, then tie things off with Naomi's activities. It's just a matter of having the time to carry them out.

Reviewer: Jessica Signed [Report This]
Date: August 24 2014 10:36 PM Title: Sisters - Part 6

This was a wonderful chapter, of seeing something truly delicate and beautiful. I was in tears as well by the end of the chapter; another wonderful piece of work. Best of luck on your workload and classes~

Author's Response:

Thank you, both for the compliment and for the well-wishes :)

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: August 24 2014 8:36 PM Title: Sisters - Part 6

Who left this bowl of onions here!?

Author's Response:

*raises hand*