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Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 03 2015 1:32 PM Title: Place - Part 1

Oh, shit! :-(

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: February 06 2014 6:07 PM Title: Place - Part 1

I didn't think Marion could get any more unlikable, but yeah she kind of did...I have no idea how your ever going to redeem this character or if that's even possible but I dont envy having to write an arc for this character! And is she  really disgusted at the fact that Omegas dont abuse their 'godgiven' powers like she has done with betas!? Also, it seems that Omegas arent as perfect as they seem. Really interesting story you got here, Id like for more information on the outside world but its not too necessary. Great work with this, looking forward to future updates.

Reviewer: Kusanagi Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 06 2014 4:31 PM Title: Place - Part 1

Wow didn't think Marion could look worse after the previous chapters but wow. I don't know if there's anything for the Omegas to work with except fear. The only Beta she remotely liked she didn't have much issue crushing his skull. 

Not usually one for torture but Marion has it coming.

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 06 2014 9:22 AM Title: Place - Part 1

The darkside of me enjoys Marion playing with the little lady.

The kindhearted side hopes she gets what's coming to her for being a well...less than savory lady.

Reviewer: sketch Signed [Report This]
Date: February 06 2014 8:47 AM Title: Place - Part 1

I notice while Correy is still in school, his younger sister and her friends are all established professionally.  Do all Omegas track into jobs protecting the rights of Betas?

If Melody truly cares for Claire's brother like she think she does, this is nothing but false hope for Marion.  Speaking of which, does anyone know that Marion has already murdered at least two people?

I wonder if Melody is as reserved as everyone sees her?  From her description, if I was Correy I would jump at the chance to be with her.

Reviewer: riczar Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 06 2014 8:42 AM Title: Place - Part 1

Another good chapter and some insight into Marion.  I hope you will give us some historical background at some point.  My curiousity is killing me.  So many questions about how that socirty works, and only a trickle of info coming out.  If I'm hearing it correctly, Omegas were a failrly recent phenominom.  Were the young Omega women we're seeing born as Omegas or were they Alphas (or even Betas) transformed into Omegas as children?  I gather that the first Omega and possibly most adult Omegas ARE transformed from smaller sized persons.  Keep up the good writing.  Could be another classic and if played right, another "franchise" story (i.e. the Titan series, and Carrie's Science Project series).

Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 06 2014 6:50 AM Title: Place - Part 1

Another apt chapter name.

I have to admit I thought you were going to give Marion a troubled past like the others but I think it’s good that she is completely irredeemable. Naomi and Stephanie needed a foil.

Her father coming into play was expected. I hope Melody crushes Marion’s hopes at a lighter sentence and refuses the obvious bribe.

I have a feeling that rum bottle will get many uses next chapter. 

 

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