Date: July 30 2018 11:56 PM Title: Welcome To Maria
This was one of my favorite reads when new chapters were coming out. While graphic violence isn't my cup of tea I very much enjoyed a Hispanic giantess as a main focus. I was very interested in reading this story and hope to see it continues.
[Report This]Date: July 10 2014 4:12 PM Title: Welcome To Maria
Amateur Wordsmith, this is one of the coolest premises for a story that I've ever read. I think what works especially well in your story is the way you've taken the time to develop characters throughout. From Maria's initial trepidation and fear to Cynthia's hatred of prisoners to everyone in between, all the characters are fleshed out and interesting. As everyone knows, characters are the most important part of any story, and yours are top-notch!
My only piece of criticism is subjective and therefore should be taken with a boulder of salt, but I personally have gotten a bit annoyed with Maria's character. I feel like she should either stick to her convictions or just become an evil psycho like the others, because in my mind it's tough to believe that someone could occupy some sort of middle ground. On the other hand, this sort of character dissonance is what people love about stories, and I have to admit that Maria is the most multi-faceted of the bunch, so the fact that she's annoying me is probably a good thing. I just can't fathom someone with the heart that Maria seemingly has allowing these atrocities to go on. One possible solution would be to have a few lines through in here and there painting her as a shade more negligent or maybe having a flashback of her being a bit more... evil... in the past. Revealing some of those inner demons might make her actions more palatable.
In any case, this will continue to be one of the best stories on the site even if I have slight, unimportant misgivings about the title character. Honestly, I bet other readers love the back and forth with her, so really feel free to ignore my thoughts. Looking forward to more. Would love it if you included more foot scenes!
Author's Response:
Oh my, it's taken me quite a while to respond to this review, and I apologize for that. I hope that my response is satisfactory.
First off, thank you for what you said about my characters; I try my hardest to make them as realistic as possible, while at the same time giving them room to play the role. For me, it isn't an easy thing to do, I often find myself considering and reconsidering what a character should do or say, only to scrap the idea and start all over. I really appreciate that you've noticed that.
Also I love your distain for Maria's character, she can be so shallow sometimes, but that's what I love about her. She's just an ordinary girl, placed under extraordinary circumstances. And yes, she does have a dark side, but I haven't started to explore that yet.
Lastly, foot scenes incoming. I'm trying to get more action in per chapter, so you'll probably get to see more feet in the future.
[Report This]Date: June 02 2014 3:32 PM Title: Welcome To Maria
As promised her is the review that I feel as if I owe you. First I must say the idea for the story is original and I am enjoying the idea. Second Marias character is belivable which is something that isnt seen with many of the stories published anymore.
My other point you have a great writing style details that manage to keep me interested rather than boring repeated descriptive phrases.
Overall I must say this is my favorite of the stories you have written. 10/10 thus far
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review Chloe, I'm honoured. :D
The believability of the characters in this story is probably the hardest, yet most worthwhile part of writing this piece. I'm glad you noticed it, since not many people come to this story for the plot or characters if you know what I mean. Its interesting, many of the authors in the old archive frequently take this approach with characters, however for some reason Gts writing changed from providing realistic portrayals of characters to being primarily focused on the action of the story.
Once again, thanks for letting me know what you think and I look foward to future reviews from you.
Date: May 26 2014 10:14 AM Title: Welcome To Maria
This is awesome as usual from you, even though I too am not much into vore stuff, but I can clearly see the potential this plan of yours sets up for much more intimately gruesome acts.
Do you have a plan for Gerome though? I wonder what his place in your story will be.
Author's Response:
Thanks Ifcfan. Your continued support is always appreciated.
Gerome will play the central role in the following chapters. His background will be revealed slowly and his interactions with Maria and the other girls will also be focused on somewhat as well.
Although the ultimate focus of the story will always be on Maria and the prison as a whole (hense the name)
[Report This]Date: April 15 2014 1:36 AM Title: Welcome To Maria
It is not as gory as I thought but then you did say this was just a warmup. I think the whole camera thing is some sort of blackmail, Maria needs to do something or those prisoners are going to really suffer.
Author's Response:
Interesting take on the camera, we'll see how that works out. ;D
[Report This]Date: April 08 2014 9:44 AM Title: Welcome To Maria
Eevrytime I think the story is going in a one way direction, you surprise me by changing the story direction in a unique and imaginative way. Great story title and excellent story idea. I'm surprised there arent more stories like this? maybe you will inspire someone to write one someday?
Author's Response:
I just knew you'd love this story Mr. E.
Anyways. I gotta be unpredictable (or at least try to be) it keeps readers on their toes.
And I really hope I inspire someone to write someday. Its like going full circle as a writer. To become inspired to write, then inspire another.
[Report This]Date: March 08 2014 11:10 PM Title: Welcome To Maria
This is really great. You are very descriptive and create a very good sense of scale with your writing. Can't wait for the next chapters!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review Qmajor. My main focus throughout my writing is to instill a sense of scale and fabricate the most vivid mental picture I can create for the reader.
Once again, glad you enjoyed it, hope to see you next chapter.
Date: February 15 2014 12:03 AM Title: Welcome To Maria
Exelent progress. I just like to sujest(and thus is just an idea) one of the girls got ether druged ir drunk that the desid to have sex with one if the other girls. And all asisted by your resently minitursed prison. Ceep with the good work!
Author's Response:
I like the way you think. We'll see.
[Report This]Date: January 12 2014 3:53 PM Title: Welcome To Maria
Excellent again AW! And a sadistic story at that! Exactly my cup of tea as you might well know! :D
I really like the concept, though I too am courious as to how the prison shrank in the first place, or why. But I guess that it might not even be important at this point because that might not be what the story is about, I'm still not sure if there's an actual plot, or if this is just a story that will explore the characters you've introduced so far and their relationships with eachother.
I really liked Cynthia's character. I'm guessing that her sweet, cheerful nature is just a front, a facade that helps her hide her painful past and protects her from hurting even more. She must really feel relieved to have such an opportunity to fix her emotional pain of her past.
My favorite parts were definitely the paragraphs where you described her disregarding her two sex toys without much thought, then getting up and straddling her victims, having her cum dripp down onto them. It just exemplifies the power she holds over them so well, especially after she callously raises her foot over them and the reaction it causes.
Though I'm bit disappointed we didn't get to see how she used the five others she got later from the shoe box. But that's just me wanting moaaarrr!!!
And I do hope we get to see more! :D
Author's Response:
As it turns out, this is also my cup of tea lol.
As I said to Wildcatman, I am unsure at this point if I will reveal how it the prison was shrunken. The force that shrunk it in the first place is not a force that will likely show up again in the story, so like you said it isn't very important.
Cynthia's cheerful nature isn't quite a facade. She is naturally bubbly and cheerful, but she has some serious emotional and ethical issues that need to be addressed. Her character is based off the idea of someone who was hurt badly and never quite got fully over it. Its also why she can just use people like sex toys because she considers herself a victim and that everything she is doing is justified.
I am a bit proud of the cum drip part. I thought it was a nice touch.
And don't you worry Mr.Ifcfan I plan to explore all aspects of the sadistic genre before this story ends.
[Report This]Date: January 12 2014 11:17 AM Title: Welcome To Maria
Cat, you've never read any of Amateur's stories? Shame on you! They're all fantastic!
This one is no exception ;)
Author's Response:
You are the wind beneath my wings DMG. Which reminds me I have to read that new story you wrote.
Date: January 05 2014 8:56 AM Title: Welcome To Maria
Wow this looks great, can't wait to see more!
Author's Response:
Thank you codeman83. I'm glad that your eager for more.
Date: January 05 2014 2:48 AM Title: Welcome To Maria
Very excited to see where this goes.
Author's Response:
Well lets hope I can maintain that high level of enthusiasm.
[Report This]Date: January 05 2014 2:17 AM Title: Welcome To Maria
Definitely an interesting concept, looking forward to more.
Author's Response:
I dare say I'm rather proud of this idea. It hasn't been done yet as far as i can tell, and I have a practically unlimited supply of tinies to throw at the giantesses. Anyways thanks for the review AdamX I hope to hear from you next chapter.
[Report This]Date: January 04 2014 8:48 PM Title: Welcome To Maria
I like this. Great story. And I love the size of the people.
aaron
Author's Response:
Thank you aaron. I'm glad you enjoyed the first chapter, and I hope to hear from you on the next one.
Date: January 04 2014 7:40 PM Title: Welcome To Maria
This is a very cool premise here. I like that it utilizes two points of view of the inmates and Maria to give the reader a more expansive image of what's going on at the time. Though some may be bothered by the violence/discrimination, as you said, it'll certainly add to the realism of the situation and characters to have those elements present, so I say go wild with those kinds of things. It'll be interesting to see where you take this, as it's a very solid start you have here.
Author's Response:
I've been experimenting with multiple viewpoints for a while and I think I found a system that works, so hopefully I'll be adding the POV's of other characters as the story proceeds. Also I think a lot of people will definetely be bothered by the racism/violence. After all this is a story about a prison, and what kind of prison doesn't have race based gangs, and discrimination.
Its a fine line with these stories from what I've been told, so I hope I don't end up crossing it.