[Report This]Date: January 25 2014 8:11 PM Title: That Night
The detail was simply surreal! Literally! This was told so realistically, that it seemed to retreve memory from my first time... (it only lacked the profound 'smell' of sex)
Jackie reminds me alot of my first girlfriend. (You have NO idea!) She was the best to me... even though she was three years older at the time, she let me down so easily when she was through with me... I'll never forget her, but this somehow brought back all those memorys?
Benton, you've definitely got a real knack for this type of writing, and you've got a Masterpiece going with this one... the only thing that could be better would be if he was even smaller, but still , you hit all the right notes!
Great stuff Benton!
Author's Response:
Wow, that's really cool that Jackie reminds you of someone! Your girlfriend must have been really awesome. Jackie wasn't based on any specific person for me, but bits and pieces of many people as well as my own imagination. I strive to write realistic characters especially in these kinds of works. I'm glad you liked it!
[Report This]Date: January 25 2014 6:41 PM Title: That Night
I'm so glad you decided to continue this! Excellent work :)
Author's Response:
Thank you! It's kind of funny how your name fits in the the story.