Date: January 29 2014 11:02 AM Title: The Next Morning
Just caught up with this final chapter... great way to tie-it-up, though, I kept expecting him to have a cup of coffee at breakfast, and well... you know! ;)
Your spin-off sounds very interesting. You could have all sorts of people coming in, (even through the drive thru) ordering coffee and swiftly exiting into the unknown...
Short, quick, little clips, that just give enough to raise the pressure!
Ex: Joe handed the coffee to his wife to hold while he parked the car in front of the beauty salon, she handed it back to him after he parked and she went inside to get her hair done...
Upon returning, she thinks that he has left the car, as she opens the door and see's his clothe's lying there on the seat?
She would somehow discover her tiny naked husband and....
___can't wait for the spin-offs!
I'm glad you liked it! I am working on the spinnoff now, and I have to say one of the chapters I'm working on is very similar to the scenario you described!
Ths spinoff is going to be fun because it is a bit of a change for me--I am used to writing longer stories, and this will give me a chance to do short stories based around a common concept but with a wide variety of possibilities.
Date: January 26 2014 8:22 PM Title: The Next Morning
That's a nice way to end it, and your idea for a sequel sounds interesting. If you can balance that with Shrinking Show 2, then we have a lot to look forward to.
I'm glad you liked it! It won't be an issue balancing a sequel with Season Two, seeing that Season Two has already been written and just needs to be uploaded.
Date: January 26 2014 11:38 AM Title: Shrinkuccino
Okay, so this is my FAVORITE type of story. Specifically the height of the shrunken victim. There is a shortage of these out there.
The WORLD is counting on you to continue.
Yes, I said the WORLD.
Oh damn, if it's the whole world then I have to get to it! Good thing part 3 is ready and about to be uploaded!
Date: January 26 2014 7:38 AM Title: Shrinkuccino
Your premise is excellent and you've scratched the surface of what it can do. What happens when people actually start to buy Shrinkuccinos? What if people doubled or tripled the dose? This is something to consider revisiting while you upload Shrinking Show 2.
I thought I wasn't into half height, but you wrote it really well and I quite enjoyed all the interaction, in both Chapter 1 and 2.
Funny you should mention that because I am beginning to write a spin-off where some of these possibilities occur. The premise is that somebody accidentaly put Shrinkuccino beans into the expresso machine instead of regular beans and mayhem insues. Putting Shrinkuccino in different drinks will cause it to have different effects which will open up almost infinite possibilities. Each chapter wilil be a stand-alone short story about a different person or people who buy the drinks and I'll be taking suggestions for people and/or drink combinations to write about. Glad you like the story!
Date: January 25 2014 8:11 PM Title: That Night
The detail was simply surreal! Literally! This was told so realistically, that it seemed to retreve memory from my first time... (it only lacked the profound 'smell' of sex)
Jackie reminds me alot of my first girlfriend. (You have NO idea!) She was the best to me... even though she was three years older at the time, she let me down so easily when she was through with me... I'll never forget her, but this somehow brought back all those memorys?
Benton, you've definitely got a real knack for this type of writing, and you've got a Masterpiece going with this one... the only thing that could be better would be if he was even smaller, but still , you hit all the right notes!
Great stuff Benton!
Wow, that's really cool that Jackie reminds you of someone! Your girlfriend must have been really awesome. Jackie wasn't based on any specific person for me, but bits and pieces of many people as well as my own imagination. I strive to write realistic characters especially in these kinds of works. I'm glad you liked it!
Date: January 25 2014 6:41 PM Title: That Night
I'm so glad you decided to continue this! Excellent work :)
Thank you! It's kind of funny how your name fits in the the story.
Date: January 09 2014 5:08 AM Title: Shrinkuccino
The ending was a little confusing but overall it was a decent read. You could write a second chapter since Jackie could make a buisness out of letting people have interactions with him. The customers at work seemed to really enjoy him so it would make sense for people to pay money to be with him. Jackie and Melissa would obviosuly be on hand in case anything untoward happens, say if he's in a room alone with a person or people there might be a singal he will give to request for either of them to save him.
Hmm, that's an interesting idea, I hadn't considered taking the story in that direction!
The best thing about the story's premise is it can be taken in many directions, creating many spin-off possibilities.
Date: January 05 2014 3:34 PM Title: Shrinkuccino
another chapter would b great. love the idea of growucinno and naybe him growing back to like 5'6......the girls shrinking guys in schools is cool too
Thank you! Hmm a spinoff with the high school girls might be fun. It's been a while since I've tried a High School setting, but it could be enjoyable!
Date: January 05 2014 11:37 AM Title: Shrinkuccino
This tale was really well written, and I would love to see a second chapter. The way you describe everything makes it easy to imagine myself in the protagonist's place. I too would love to be small and helpless and surrounded by towering gorgeous women!
Thank you! That was the idea of the story, to put yourself in the protagonist's place.
Date: January 04 2014 7:45 PM Title: Shrinkuccino
I found this both exciting and interestingly discriptive. The different reactions from the giantess's as their personalitys' were delivered without restraint.. Being as they were observing this tiny miniature male as if he were still a man, but- they had suddenly doubled in size, twice their normal size!
35" tall and he was still attempting to casually go out among the 'thankfully' mostly all female customers, and 'serve' them the free samples...Thrilling! To think of actually doing that? Wow... I don't know if I could? I found this written very eloquently, a few minor errors, that could be easily ignored, as your continually changing situation set up, more than kept it interesting, it was very exciting!
I would like to see him much smaller, but not the 'Micro-sized', but, maybe just a half-foot tall, 6-inches. I would like to see what would happen if he would drink another cup, and lost half his size once again... 17" Tall ! yeah, that's about right!
I think your writing is excellent, and your tale was very suspenceful. I would love to see another Chapter Great Stuff!
Thank you! I am actually working on a second chapter as we speak.