[Report This]Date: December 21 2013 2:29 AM Title: Chapter 3
Because of that screw-up, I'm done reading! :P
Seriously, I really enjoy this short series, and the way you've made the action flow from the characters, rather than trying to shoehorn them into scenarios. Nothing has happened yet that has made me think, "Oh, well, he's trying to get Vincent swallowed here." You have a handle on your characters, and that makes the story work.
And if I may offer a bit of advice...if you find yourself at a crossroads after chapter seven, ask your characters what they want to do. They probably know. I know a lot of times I've found myself fighting writer's block, it's been because I've been trying to force characters to go in a direction they didn't want to. I can't guarantee anything, of course, but it's worth a shot.