[Report This]Date: January 09 2014 5:51 PM Title: Chapter 12: Breaking Amends
You kind of have a way to make us feel bad for everyone at-least once in your stories...then you remind us he's killed somebody via drunk driving.
Go Maggie!
Author's Response:
Thanks! I want Scott to seem at least relatable, given that he's the protagonist, but I'm not letting him off the hook for what he did at the beginning.
Date: January 09 2014 3:30 PM Title: Chapter 12: Breaking Amends
First off I want to say that I am enjoying this series and this particular storyline immensely. I've been reading the stories since you first started the series and I've liked the way it's developed. I also wanted to add that I think your writing has improved remarkably over the many, many chapters you have written. Very few mistakes in things like punctuation and spelling, etc., and your style has become more fluid.
You make the characters believable as well; each with their own distinct personality and speech patterns. Your descriptions are good and plot-wise everything seems well thought out, such as Scott's moving on to college and the mother's involvement in getting the law passed, etc.
As to the Giant/M/m wariness, I've noticed that as well, both here and on other 'different fetish' sites. I think you handled it wisely; simply noting M/m interaction beforehand to warn those who do not want to read it to skip the chapter. Personally though I agree with you in your thoughts on supporting characters, and especially male supporting cast. Showing both sexes gives the story and the world that it is written in a firmer sense of reality in my opinion, making it even more believable, despite the fantastic circumstances of the story's theme- shrinking.
Keep up the great work and thanks for sharing.
Author's Response:
Thanks very much for reading/reviewing! I appreciate what you said about my writing style; I'd like to think I've marginally improved over the 2.5 years I've been writing for the site. I've been trying hard to make the environment of the story feel as real as possible in character background and action so that the reader can just focus on the fantastical shrinking elements. In this case, acknowledging the presence of a giant guy was one way of doing that, without necessarily turning it into some twisted M/m scenario.
[Report This]Date: January 09 2014 3:16 PM Title: Chapter 12: Breaking Amends
Cannot wait for Maggie. I have been looking forward to her appearance. I wonder what she has planned since she set her clock early. Hope she has some awesome Ideas. Great chapter, and even though Kyle is a support character I do not see him helping Scott out at all. Kyle doesn't seem to be the sympathetic type, also I like how Scott uses the I was drunk so it wasn't my fault line. Most pwople would use this line and it pisses me off when they do. I hope he uses it with Judy or Maggie or both and see how they react. Maybe Kyle could say something to them about what Scott thinks. I can see both Judy and Maggie having a really bad reaction to that line.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing! Maggie has indeed got some pretty twisted ideas coming up. You are correct about Kyle, at least for now; despite his presence in the story as a "support" character, he has no intention of aiding Scott. And Scott would have to be pretty foolish to use that line around Judy or Maggie, though who knows what may slip out in the heat of the moment...
[Report This]Date: January 09 2014 11:33 AM Title: Chapter 12: Breaking Amends
I'm not a fan of M/m, but I liked this chapter.
I'm looking forward to the next chapter!(Which I hope comes out soon!) :)
Author's Response:
Thanks! Judging by your username, you'll find a lot to like about the next chapter. ;)