Reviewer: PoweredByCaffeine Anonymous [Report This]
Date: December 28 2013 1:36 PM Title: Chapter 9: Hitting the Spot

I've been following this series a while, and I would finally like to congratulate you on it. Your writing is very good, and I like your descriptions and use of Scott's perspective. I can picture exactly what's happening as I read :).

Also, that "Bruce Lee with a barrel of cocaine" sentence was the funniest thing I've read in a while xD

Nice job! :)

Author's Response:

Thanks for reading!  Sometimes I like to toss in little absurdities like the Bruce Lee line to help illustrate the sheer ridiculousness of a situation, so I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Reviewer: el_rooto Signed [Report This]
Date: December 28 2013 7:21 AM Title: Chapter 9: Hitting the Spot

I almost guessed what she would be doing this time, except that I didn't think she would have anything more specific than "sore/tired feet", and I was pretty sure she would complain about having to take he family to the trial rather than spending time working on the case.

But since you said you were curious to hear what we thought was going to happen, I'll try...

Short term, I thought that, since he's being punished 24/7, she'd make him take care of her shoes - she wouldn' have worn them so much on her own after all, and I wonder if she'd actually take them off while he's cleaning them :)

Long term, I have a couple of alternatives in mind:

1. she takes care of him, which is pretty easy given his size, and gives her the excuse to remind him of everything she's doing for him, and therefore declare her requests "reasonable";
2. she makes him wash him wash his clothes etc: that's a reasonable request by definition, and it gives her the chance to make things as easy (or difficult) as she pleases, and to judge how well he did.

If I had to bet, I'd pick option #1, but I think I'll wait and see what you have planned -- with so many variables involved (size, sister, ...) it's difficult to make correct predictions, and experience tells me it's worth to wait.

 

Author's Response:

Thanks for reading, and some interesting guesses there.  Maggie's section is coming up soon, where I think readers are going to see the more intense action of the story, though Judy's still got some surprises up her sleeves, especially in later installments of the series.

Reviewer: AdamX Signed [Report This]
Date: December 27 2013 2:26 AM Title: Chapter 9: Hitting the Spot

Great stuff, looking forward to seeing Maggie's return as well.

Author's Response:

Thanks! She's coming, I promise.