Reviewer: mimiru888 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 03 2014 11:03 AM Title: Coming to terms

Deffinetly liking the story so far, certainly an interesting plot twist with Stacey making her sister "dissapear" for the moment; Can't wait to see what happens to her inside of Rebbecca :3

Also interested to see how Micheal and the Munchkin's are doing inside of Stacey. :)

 

Can't wait to read more!

Reviewer: stevenec345 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 03 2014 10:04 AM Title: Stacy + shrink ray =

Thank you so much , I really love this story !

it's will be great if you could write more about the shrunken bus and the Munchkin family :)

I just imagine Stacy shrinking her mother's shoe to 1 cm and thinking about how the bus should be really tiny now and lets a big fart into the inside of the shoe creating a new atmosphere with the stench of her mother's foot + her fart.

After that she will enlarge the shoe to normal size , only the poor shrunken bus could smell this stench , her mother will only smell her foot sweat like always if she put her nose close to her shoes :)

 

Author's Response:

Thank you, I'm glad you're enjoying my story and I hope you continue to do so.

Reviewer: Cameron99 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 03 2014 3:34 AM Title: Coming to terms

Glad to see you continue the story ,as I really enkoy it. I would love to see Stacy swallow someone alive now, as vore is my favorite thing, and with REbecca doing it to Kate, inthe story it oculd give Stacy the idea, it's a torturous punishment that takes care of theevidence. And wasn't there soemthing earlier about Emma being picked on?> Could be a good way to deal with that individual. ;)

Author's Response:

Right now I'm working on the Munchkin arc but don't worry. Stacy has very good ideas about getting rid of evidence and knows the power of digestion in getting rid of it. If you want vore then the next arc might be about Kate's suffering with Rebecca =)

Reviewer: AdamX Signed [Report This]
Date: February 02 2014 11:44 PM Title: Coming to terms

Glad to see this back.

Author's Response:

Yes, I might make another chapter or two, depending on what people vote for if they vote at all.

Reviewer: fated11 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 14 2013 12:29 PM Title: A fatal mistake

Wow I loved what you had Angela do....

Reviewer: thejoker2445 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 13 2013 1:36 AM Title: Stacy + shrink ray =

I freaking LOVE this story. Please continue to write it :) one suggestion I have for you to do is have a chapter where Stacy shinks a random woman (or group of women) that she doesn't know and plays around and tortures her/them. Preferrably feet and definitely vore and mouth play. Maybe have Stacy carry the woman in her mouth all day like a piece of gum? Just a thought :) keep up the good work!

Reviewer: AdamX Signed [Report This]
Date: December 12 2013 12:17 AM Title: Jasmine's new life

Solid stuff so far.

Author's Response:

thank you ======))))))

Reviewer: AdamX Signed [Report This]
Date: November 27 2013 9:56 AM Title: Proving a point.

Great to see this back.

Reviewer: gerald Signed [Report This]
Date: November 26 2013 3:33 PM Title: Proving a point.

Well, she is angry at her sister, so she begins a genocidal rampage killing dozens of innocents. Now, I don't know much about teenage rebellious stage – I don't feel like I have been through one myself and the ones I have observed didn't seem so murderous. And I simply cannot imagine Stacy resorting to such means to.. actually, I don't even know what she is trying to accomplish. And she is doing those things not in the heat of the moment, they were actually fairly (for a fourteen year old, at least) well planned and cold-blooded murders.

The main problem with all those paraphilia stories is that murder is greatly underappreciated here. It is just a way of character indulging the readers, without even considering the consequences. And not legal – they could theoretically get away with what characters do, but rather moral and emotional. Contrary to what most (all?) “writers” around those sites think, it is not that “easy” to kill a person (let alone people) and live with it.

That is why I treat stories here as pure porn (intellectually speaking, but often considering the content too) and, well.. I suppose I should have did so with this one. I shouldn't have used my brain while reading it. It is just that.. every now and then I have this glimpse of hope, that maybe.. just maybe.. somebody.. anybody... might finally try to actually think about it. To portray such actions realistically, to actually imagine how a person would feel while doing such things. And I believe that it wouldn't be that easy for her to just keep killing innocents.

I wanted to inspire You to think about it, but.. I don't even know why I keep trying to suggest going through such effort – I mean, nobody seems to even try to understand, let alone attempt such story. Well, I guess I had too many Mozart's Piano Concertos today – my shrink advised me to lay them off. Or at least limit to one or two per day – that is enough to put me in the mood and anything more.. well, we can already see the effects of that. But at least they are better than Tchaikovsky...

So sorry for inconveniencing You and I will try not to ever review any stories again. Fair enough?

PS: You may consider using < br/ > in responses to comments, since this silly php script doesn't translate line breaks properly.

Reviewer: gerald Signed [Report This]
Date: November 26 2013 8:30 AM Title: Proving a point.

No offense and all the rest of it.

Okay.. so.. I understand this very human desire of Yours to simplify things so they are easier to understand, to comprehend and classify, but.. I believe that people are a bit more complicated than how You seem to portray them.

At least how You make Stacy act and behave is far too simple – her actions make her look as if she was only and completely filled with pure hatred, having no conscience, no regrets and even no slightest thought about what she is doing. Was this oversimplification deliberate? I mean.. while the “fun” she is having with her victims is somewhat “amusing”, if You will, it also quickly (around ch4 already) seemed fake and exaggerated. After all – what is the point in dolls playing with other dolls? (Not even sex-dolls in this case)

And one other thing: did You make her this way just to fuel the story's progression or do You actually believe that people might behave that way?

Oh, and I am not saying that she should be super-gentle and extra-careful all the time (or even at all, for that matter), just merely that people are usually affected by more than just one emotion, and while certain outbreaks are understandable – especially when emotionally distressed – she had several days to think about what was happening.

And “was happening” because it no longer seems like it is her that is doing those things, but rather some invisible force that drives her meaningless actions.

I don't know, just some random thoughts.

Author's Response:

first of, I have never pretended to be a very good author and don't plan saying it now. I'm not very good with character developement or plot and am pretty much learning as i go. I'm really using this website to help improve upon my many weak points in writing. Secondly, I don't see Stacy as a character full of hate as she obviously loves her mother, has friends she cares about and gets along with most of her sisters. Most of her hatred comes from Kate which she believes is trying to replace her mother and wants to control Stacy's life. She is also a character with a prominant mean streak and does in fact enjoy seeing other people suffer (possibly because she thinks she has suffered a lot and hasn't had a mother to calm these feelings. so to sum up, she is filled with a lot of hate but it is usually directed at people she feels is trying to control her or are out to get her (most notably her teacher and Kate). Because of this she also likes to see other people suffer, usually people "lesser" then herself and people she can control (like Micheal). She's quite a twisted character.