Reviewer: zol Signed [Report This]
Date: November 08 2013 1:25 PM Title: Chapter 3 Biology Class

Ahh, so chapter 2 wasnt all finished when you uploaded it, makes sense now :3 I really liked the whole frog idea, really really clever. I guess Jason is doomed :x I would had liked it even more if he would have picked up by his best friend, boys mostly are even more "cruel" in this kind of topic and make fun out of it all, telling jokes and such, would be an even more humiliating way to go. As I mentioned before, I would love to see a tf at some point ending as a tiny single corn or oat meal flake, and getting swallowed by one of Cassie's own horses. Reading the word "bird food" also got me back to that this would be an awesome ending for a character, getting tfed into a tiny insect and eaten by a bird, or a tiny food like a single berry of some kind, or a peace of candy, like a single M&M. I thought actually the girl would become the shampoo content itself but I wanted it to be open for my mind haha :x I really love the whole idea of the penny reducing random people around the girls, and they have no idea about it, where in the end, I guess Cassie and Susan would become trapped of their own "fun" medicine. I would like the plot idea of Cassie unknownigly "tfing" Susan, maybe in her stables at home, and feeding her to one of her stallions. But also theres room for others now of all the classmates and even the teachers around. I really like the whole plot developement :)

Author's Response:

No it was finished, I just overlooked that I didn't paste it correctly, or there was some kind of error that cut the content. An accident of course, but it's fixed now.

Well I have to show the Penny's influence too, not just the characters misuse of the Penny. We'll see what happens to Jason next chapter. As for the shampoo TF, I considered just what you said. I almost did not give a TF POV or narration of Janet's predicament. In the end a POV scene was added, but mostly because I felt like it this time.

As for the end, I can't really spoil it, partially because it's not even written yet, but it's forming in my mind, and is getting better the more I think on it. The farm may never play anymore then a plot device for Cassie's cruelty. Well I hate to call it cruelty, it's more like she has an imbalance in her brain like a serial killer, where she determines the lives of other things, like pigs at the farm etc, are no more valuable than Janet's. Of course all that's diving deep into Cassie's character which isn't 100% set in stone just yet.

Anyways, thanks again for the review, and look forward to the next chapter when it comes.